Pedestal

Just something I think needed saying!

Another year and people

are talkin' more s**t

Think it's cool to point out

I got another zit

Well it's part of life

so deal with it

And I gotta speak

so listen in

What was that I saw

last week on your chin?

 

You put yourself on a pedestal

But it's about to fall

I'm gonna tear it down  around you

Cause I'm here to tellt he truth.

 

Dieting, not me

I don't have to be a size three

Starving myself won't

make me happy

I like my curves and

my lumps

I take the good

witht he bumps.

 

You put yourself on a pedestal

But it's about to fall

I'm gonna tear it down  around you

Cause I'm here to tellt he truth.

 

You think you're great

for your look

And that hit of acid

that you took

Got all the nerds keepin'

you from openin' a book

Cheerleading doesn't

pay for college

And dating the quarterback

doesn't give you knowledge.

 

You put yourself on a pedestal

But it's about to fall

I'm gonna tear it down  around you

Cause I'm here to tellt he truth.

 

I may not always wear

name brand

Or carry carets

on my hand

But I look good

and thats my stand

Value isn't always

determined by cost

Lookin' to names and numbers

will get you lost.

 

You put yourself on a pedestal

But it's about to fall

I'm gonna tear it down  around you

Cause I'm here to tellt he truth.

 

What's it like

to be number one

Are you really

havin' so much fun

Hiding, trying

not to come undone.

Those of us

down to earth

we can see your

true worth.

 

You put yourself on a pedestal

But it's about to fall

I'm gonna tear it down  around you

Cause I'm here to tellt he truth.

 

Can you feel the shake

The rumble my truth makes

Or is that the sound of your mistakes

There you go fade into the past

But the truth is here to last.

Reviews

[Natalie C]

Oh yes something that needed to be said. You are so right, life is so much more than who or what you wear, date of look like. You wrote this like almost a revelation to the high society misfits that wouldn't know any better.

Loved the flow and the fact that you kept repeating the one stanza just seemed to strengthen your message and the urgency with which you have written it.

Great work!

[Cassandra]

I feel like we all went to school with these people who thought themselves better than the rest... the popular crowd.
Seems like this could be the lyrics to a song. Your repetitive refrain " you put yourself on a pedestal.. "could be a chorus. I like the message in this, assertive and confidant. I also really like the last stanza.. the crescendo (Can you feel the shake, the rumble my truth makes)
and resolution (There you go fade into the past But the truth is here to last) if you will, summed up real short.. good stuff.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

A pernicious aspect of vanity is self importance over others. However, it is written, that egoism and pride come before a fall!

This is a great poetical 'dig', at the puffed up narcissism of some! The repetitive use of the verses;

You put yourself on a pedestal
But it's about to fall
I'm gonna tear it down around you
Cause I gotta tell whats true.

Adds convection to the composition - well done!

God's Blessing
Phillozofee

[Whisperer]

This is quite brilliant! Yes, the idea is not new but so many of us have this overwhelming feeling so often, going by what is happening around the world. I, for one, am not able to stand things that are fake, things untrue, that won't last the test of time...

I enjoyed this poem. And I wish we all could be so self-assured so as not to aspire for the common materialistic goals. I think beauty lies in our individuality, our uniqueness. Only when we are able to free ourselves from this cycle of fear, can we find truth. And beauty.