The Monster

This is my first and last peom probably

 

I feel like there's a monster inside of me trying to get out

It's tears, howls, and its rips at my soul

But I know if it does get out 

 it will destroy everything

Leaving only ashes as it laughs at my hopes and dreams

It’s the reason I am alone

And that’s just the way it likes it.

Author's Note

Please ignore the grammar problems

Reviews

[The Batman]

The metaphor could be related to in several different ways, which is a good thing, since there are a variety of readers. It does have a good amount of emotion within it that impacts the reader. Great write crafted here, once again.

[melissa]

Great poem

[Jazique]

nicely done with descriptions and words; it reminds me the book I'm reading with "the monster" of the book series "Crank". The poem was short and simple so even with the grammar problems which seems few; well done and keep up the excellent work as the poem relates to many people who stay alone to keep their inner monster alone.

[Miss Coral]

I think that you could possibly reword "But I know if it does get out " to make it less repetitive, and make the end a bit stronger from the third line on, but otherwise, nice job. Great concept :)

-Coral-

[Dizzy]

It made me think you don't like how you are inside. And it takes work to stay in control. I liked it except one line "it's tears, howls, and its tears" I think it needs more explaing.

[Senseless whatever]

Good write. Good expression of being lost, not understanding yourself. this is a little rough for a short read.
"It's tears, howls, and its tears" Repetition and word use, what were you saying?
Final line makes sense, in conversation. You may want to rethink the wording a little just to liven the piece as a whole.

[shenu]

The monster inside that you have described is commonly called your shadow side. If you don't confront it and deal with it whilst incarnate - you will have to confront it after death as the Dweller on the Threshold. An excellent metaphysical description. Please write more.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This is a good poem. I feel like this too. I understand how you feel. Good poem. :)
Thanks for sharing. :)

[FocusedAmnesia]

I love the first and last lines

[B MacGregor]

Exactly! You made me believe this is how I should feel every day of my life. You made it so real. It talked to me.

Right on.