Hit Me

Car tried to hit me. Its not the first time but I was watching. I edited and added more to it.

 

 

 

Hit Me

I was driving home tonight

I looked up in the dark sky with the stars shining bright

No one behind me, just pinch black

I’m passing cars, the lights fade into the mysterious highway

I get closer to home

A car passes me in the left lane

I’m in the middle

I am watching him the whole time

I knew exactly what he was going to do

He starts to move into my lane

I’m thinking, “just hit me”
But everything I know flashes before my eyes
Family, friends, loves, and my life
If he would have hit me I imagine them all crying
My sisters weren't too far behind me
They would have seen my car crashed and crushed
Their hearts would have died
If he would have hit me not only my life would have been damaged
My whole world would have been torn
Everyone that I saw in my soul

Is what made me glide into the right lane

I had an angel watching over me 
I was suppose to be alive tonight.

Reviews

[Gravedigger]

Sometimes it takes life threatening moments to bring out our destiny, and I think you really reflected that well. I am glad you made it out okay. Good job portraying that scary event!

[Orlando Murcia]

Very nice write
I have actually wanted
bad things to happen to me
so my family would be sad

I am glad you posted this babe
Excellent work!

Orlando

[Pikkakard]

An interesting topic for a poem.
You managed to put what was going through your mind onto paper very well
A good poem, and a good story too
P

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

Its a good Poet, let you see into the future, what would happen if, I know you , i know you wat to live so much, for the upcoming future, I know how you full of love, anticipation for the happy days that would come, whe you will smile again with your wonderful ssmile, kiss, and love.... Yossi

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

This is a very well written poem. I lost my son a year ago head on collision by a drunk driver so this poem definately hits home for me. I am glad you are okay. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[thibodeaux]

oh my god kylie!!
that one made me cry!!!

wow that was powerful

[Larissa G.]

Simple and deep indeed, but maybe maybe add on some image between when he begins to move and you glide into the right lane? The first thing I thought of was an unwary hunter nearly capturing the trembling prey. Don't know if that makes sense, but I thought something like that would fit in there well.
But hey: it was a well felt poem with a very nice flow to it. Well done.

[W.Piggy]

Woah. it's really nice.
It's simple and yet so deep... i really like it.
Keep on writing..

W.Piggy ^^

[Raja]

A kind of continuation is there in your poem, and I like it. You may call it a sequel. Readers might want to know what happened next? On the creatie front, it is quite simple to abosorb, yet powerful in its approach to grab the attention. I like the idea.

Thank you.

Raja.