Sinking In Smoke

Its short, but theres meaning.

 

Sinking In Smoke

As I laid in bed
The smell drifts into my room
I inhale it in my lungs
My heart sinks into my sheets
I drown in my tears
And there is absolutely
Nothing I can ever do
To stop him..

Reviews

[deeps]

this is sad, but well written

[HorrorMaster]

aww *hugs* very sad poem

[THE LOST ROSE]

AMAZING! This is very different for you QP and I like this. I haven't been able to review your latest works since I've been back. If this is the stuff you have been putting down on blansk sheets of paper I have been missing out on life. I look forward to reading more and more and more.

[closed account]

ugh.. so deep and sad,,
such a few words exspressed
so much emotion...
that is what a poet is all about!!

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

Very powerful!

[Phantom Heart]

It's a fantastic piece, very well done.

[purplepenguin9]

So sad, and straight to the point.
Each word is exactly where it needs to be.
Great work.

[17thWhitePrince]

WoW !!!

You said it so well !!!
Nothing more needs to be said !!!

WoW !!!