Away

Swinging through the ashes left around my door

Twirl me through the glass shards that glitter on the floor 

Away through open windows a whisper tinted lie

Fragile as we wait their secrets pass us by

 

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

This was soooo beautiful. I have not visited in a while but I did...:).....................

[ron]

Interesting poem about lies and ashes of a relationship...if I got it right. Loved it.

[Calissa Knox]

Very mysterious and beautifully written.

This is an interesting poem. It left me wanting to read more.

[Great Aunt Astri]

A poignant little poem with imagery which took me right there. Windows can be open. shut or shattered, and they can hide a lot.

[ANTO]

Its a dark write Riley - gothic almost but it is about love I think so there is just one facet of this wonderful gem glinting at the moment. If I look harder I can see the love in it among the ashes and broken glass.
Good writing - write more - the RRs can wait
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[QuietlyCrash]

Thanks for your kindness, sweets! I'm really just trapped in writer's block and I can't seem to get out, sadly.

[Blissful Sin]

wonderful imagery! I enjoyed this to my fill.

-Bliss

[closed]

such words allow me to imagine that something is being shifted
much as wheat is sifted
and of course like any good piece, leaves much else to the imagination

an interesting work that has given me an eye for your writing

[ayosonolowo]

Great and nice written
very thoughtfull
i really like it

[Sam A]

nice imagery on this one. I can really see this as I read. Great writing! I hope to read more at some point.