Again!

And in the city of love,
Did his blotted soul wander tonight .
His mind calling out for it,
But little did it have knowledge .
He craved for some remorse,
From walking alone and dead .
The caring seeds of affection,
Resurrecting his lost sides again.
But there was a trammel,
Those memories passed once again .
Not those that were painful,
Cuts too deep to be false .
But those that were too good,
To be true once upon a time .

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A sad story written in the poem. Memories can be sweet and memories can be sad. I liked the flow of thoughts leading to the powerful ending. Thank you Raghib for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Geodan]

Cuts too deep to be false But those that were too good To be true once upon a time
Beautiful!

[Giulia King]

"And in the city of love,
Did his blotted soul wander tonight." Favorite line. Well done.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A sobering piece in which the protagonist recognises his demise and despite wishing for salvation feels too far gone already.

[Bear]

In the steps of the dead judgement must weigh heavy on ones soul as memories testify. I like this concept and it is going to haunt my thinking for days to come, thank you for that I love things that touch my mind :~) Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Raghib]

Thank you for the review . Glad you liked the concept

[Najam Us Saher]

You took me on a journey along with your words. Descriptive and painful write, I liked it.

[Raghib]

i think this was my worst write . please be truthfull Najam

[Najam Us Saher]

No, this is not bad. It gives a clear image that a soul in a city of love feels isolated and he is lost in his own thoughts wanting to feel affection from others.

[Raghib]

Thank you for your assurance . I was thinking this was bad .

[Najam Us Saher]

It isn't. You are welcome :)

[wordman]

once upon a time,the memories that dwell in my mind

[Raghib]

i dont understand whether you like my poems or not ?

[wordman]

of course i do