Adam's Apple

a twist on genesis

it wasn't eve with genesis in her dew-bejeweled eyelashes
that woke the rift with the juice of knowledge coating her
prehistorically pink tongue.

it wasn't eve with the language of the birds nestled in her hands
that heard the whisper of serpentine secrets
slither down from the perch of her sisters.

it wasn't eve with unborn nations in her belly that allowed
shame to pull away the curtains of their innocence as dawn
set the stage for their costumes.

it wasn't eve with god's name in her heart that forgot to worship
with her body and mind when she was consumed with the mistake
of love.

the story has carried a masculine slant through the ages
and the daughters of eve have carried the hate.

the first lie lives on well seasoned
and we continue to believe
while we carry adam's apple
to humanity's grave.

Reviews

[Sorry Infamous]

instant favorite...
lately I have been obsessing over this whole Adam and Eve story. This is something I find myself wishing I had wrote first! I am glad that you got to it before me though because you have such a command over the use of metaphors. "prehistorically pink tongue" or "dew-bejeweled eyelashes" - wonderful.

[Angel's Lady]

Wow. I like this! Very original.
with the language of the birds nestled in her hands -- love this line!
Great write. Nicely done!

[Ninelilies]

As a feminist...hell yeah!!! What an amazing twist on yet another portion of the male anatomy! Good job--S

[Gandré]

Hey, Brian! How comes I didn't see this? This is wow ! That's the ultimate pro poem for all androgyne creatures... yes even a gynandromorph! I adored the massive impact on my imagination while reading it. Say, is it the angel that can be even a hellraiser in the quite comfort of our habits how we see the others? Watch out, Brian comes! My friend, there is potential in your creativity. I wanna know what you write in 10 years.

I loved each line but this knocked me off my feet " it wasn't eve with unborn nations in her belly that allowed
shame to pull away the curtains of their innocence as dawn
set the stage for their costumes."