What You Couldn't See

It was there, But it went unnoticed.

It’s your choice,
Not mine.
You can either draw,
or erase the line.
I’ll love you forever,
Until the end of time.
Even if you don’t want me,
I’ll still wish you were mine.
you are my sky,
you are my sunshine.
When you look at me,
A shiver runs down my spine.
but right now our relationship is a tangled vine,
Soon to be an empty shrine.
I love you,
but I guess you didn’t have a clue,
Of how much my love grew and grew.
but what have you left me as?
A stripped screw.
But I guess I can’t blame you,
you never knew,
How much I really did love you.

Author's Note

i wrote it at 2 am, when i was feeling down with pessimistic thoughts about my relationship. i hope you like it.

Reviews

[[Mackenzie]]

This is an excellent poem, with great rhyming. I'm a bit unsure about some of the phrases, for example "A stripped screw", but overall it flows well, and your grammar is near perfect!

[talulu love]

love the rhyming


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