Leaf

Trying to understand and write metaphors. Any suggestions greatly appreciated.

 

I am a leaf that trembles

Before the roar of wind

Moving this way and that way

Stripped from the anchor to circle

And, tumble with the howls

Amidst the throw-away litter

Racing down the roadway

End over end, round and round

Unaware, oblivious of danger

Skimming the sterile ground

Coming to rest in the gutter

Where all leaves end

Author's Note

Review as you will. Suggestions on writing a poem in metaphor style are appreciated. Thank You

Reviews

[Butch Decatoria]

A leaf on the wind... ever seen the movie serenity, the pilot of the spaceship kept saying that "I am a leaf in the wind"... we are all leaves in the wind aren't we.? good write... luv this

[JudyC]

Racing down the roadway
End over end, round and round

I think you've hit it on the head here, as far as writing in metaphor. Reading these lines, for example, I can perfectly picture an autumn leaf, as well as myself, being tossed "end over end" by life itself. The flow and phrasing have a lilt that is reminiscent of a leaf in a breeze. You've done what you set out to do, my friend!