Let Me Be Alone With Me

I love life/I love people. When alone I think of both. The noise of life can be overwhelming. It is in solitude I can see and understand things more clearly..

i wish i was

a bird with wings

to sail above

everything

high above

the homeless camps

broken people

exit ramps

take my chances

above the clouds

look down upon

the weary crowds

let me glide

above it all

the greed and hate

the shopping mall

 

because i don't need a lover

i don't need a friend

i don't need you to lie for me

hold my hand or pretend

i want to ride upon the breeze

let it guide my destiny

i just need a heart i know

let me be alone with me

 

i wish i was

a bird with wings

looking down

on wedding rings

pushed in back

of musty drawers

with musty dreams

of moon lit shores

i want to fly

beyond the sight

of everyone

who hurts for spite

above the wars

fought for greed

a world that's lost

it's dignity

 

because i don't need a lover

i don't need a friend

i don't need you to lie for me

hold my hand or pretend

i want to ride upon the breeze

let it guide my destiny

i just need a heart i know

let me be alone with me

 

 

Reviews

[Nick Erickson]

"pushed in back
of musty drawers
with musty dreams
of moon lit shores"

"a world that's lost
it's dignity"

This sums up the necessity for moments of solitude, to let us get above it all, forgetting all our woes and minor worries and look down upon the world as a whole. Excellent.

The comment about a world that's lost it's dignity is so fitting, one of the reasons we need to escape. Nothing is sacred or private any more.

Well done.

[Jet Lag]

as a person long overdue for solitude, and who finally got some this fall and is healing, i appreciate this.
as a person who is sometimes dismayed by humans' treatment of one another and the environment -- and i include myself as part of the sometimes disappointing group -- i appreaciate this.

beautiful, flowing, touching.

[Collette]

Your words are hauntingly beautiful...I think there is something to be said about an individual who can transcend every earthly tie and hover above the misery for a while. I feel your longing in this piece, -it is a deep river that flows slowly and rhythmically. I am always impressed with your work, not merely the poems themselves, but the content and variety of ideas you share with the world. This piece was no exception! Thanks for sharing.

[~Wandering Soul~]

this is amazing
i love this its jst absolutely amazing
its goin in my fav list :)
great work xx

[THE LOST ROSE]

Let the creative "Rain" on all of us. Thank you for showcasing style and substance. This was a great read. An artist that created a song that is how it flowed. I just love your work and I can't highlight everything. Those are my favorite lines in your poem, every single one of them. This doesn't need to be rated. A 100 is not enough. Standing "O" my brother.

[~angelalala~]

wow. this poem hit me like a brick. it hit me on a personal level. oh how i can relate to each word in this piece. "i want to fly
beyond the sight
of everyone
who hurts for spite" this holds such truth, such pure honesty. and the flow is magical. i love how you blend whimsical things and rhyme them with everyday ordinary things like exit ramps and shopping malls. a wonderfully written poem from a very talented writer.

[Spoken]

because i don't need a lover
i don't need a friend
i don't need you to lie for me
hold my hand or pretend

i understand these words.. perfect

*sigh*.. this world is a beautiful tragedy.. love it.. hate it.. wanna change it...

your words are you

[Marvin Lewis Jr.]

This is truly inspiring!
One of my favorite lines was...
"because I don't need a lover
I don't need a friend
I don't need you to lie for me
hold my hand or play pretend."

Great job!

[Dezaraye]

This is a beautiful piece. I think that sometimes we all feel this way. I often picture myself floating and flying amongst the clouds. There's something freeing about imagining it ... escape is awesome. I love the flow to this, it reminds me of something, but I'm not sure what ...

[John A Common]

Just a beautifull poem rain. The imagery is so powerfull that it takes the reader with you on a journey of sadness and hope. Honestly I wish I was a bird so could s**t on those basterds heads that just fired me.

[Dave "Doc" Rogers]

Nicely done, Ray. You took the reader into a world not their own. A change of perspective in flight to let them see your perspective on things through verse. Nicely done.

This is another good bit of writing. Perfect? No, but it doesn't have to be. It just needs to take the reader some place and let them see from your perspective.

Nicely done.

Cheers!
Doc.