Just then....

Just then....

A Story by Rajat malik
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It is a short abstract from my novel.

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Just as I passed off from my street, I saw her sitting inside her school bus but I noticed that she didn't look cheerful that morning. She was thinking about something, maybe me. She didn't looked quite happy yet she was adorable. I just wanted to hug her at that moment may be to console myself or to console her, whatever the reason was. I had never wanted her to be sad but after seeing her in that condition, I prayed to god to take care of her in my absence. After sometime she saw me staring at her blindly and she waved her hand to say goodbye. I also tried to lift my hands but I didn't had so much power to move them. Tears rolled down my cheeks and I moved my face in the opposite direction from her, because I knew that after seeing me cry she would also do that. I took out my handkerchief and wiped away my tears. Just then, in the background I heard the school bus leaving. Few minutes later I cried and I cried hard thinking about everything which we shared before.

© 2015 Rajat malik


Author's Note

Rajat malik
It's my favorite Page from my novel..... Hope you will like it

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That was so cute :) you managed to convey the emotions loud and clear...
I loved it :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rajat malik

10 Years Ago

Yeap!!! I too hope so....u encouraged me, thanks for that.....
p.s. congrats on your rhyming
Maumil Mehraj

10 Years Ago

hahaa....i am glad i could do that
Rajat malik

10 Years Ago

Hmmmm.......
oh its beautifully written...very well described...:))

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rajat malik

10 Years Ago

I am greatful to you.... thanks
nice cute & innocent short si story.....pr puri si hai..well written.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rajat malik

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much.....
The piece is nice. A little story full of emotions and well portrayed. Please correct the mistakes already pointed out by others and then this could be a short masterpiece

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rajat malik

10 Years Ago

thanks for stopping by :) I appreciate your views
Dipanjan Dutta

10 Years Ago

My pleasure
it's good but there are just mistakes which you must remove


Posted 10 Years Ago


Rajat malik

10 Years Ago

I would be very thankful if you will tell the errors.....
Shubham Joshi

10 Years Ago

she didn't "have" cheerful face,didn't "look"
Rajat malik

10 Years Ago

okk....thanks will change it soon
Other than some grammer mistakes, its cute :-)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rajat malik

10 Years Ago

I am glad that you said it's cute....
hmm..good work:-)........

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rajat malik

10 Years Ago

oh!!! thank you so much dear
really intriguing........
well written......
p.s. didn't "have"
really liked it!!!
:)


Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rajat malik

10 Years Ago

Ohh!!! Thank you so much, pushkar
Pushkar Prabhat

10 Years Ago

you are welcome bhai.........!!! :) :)

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Added on May 5, 2015
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Rajat malik
Rajat malik

Shamli, U.P., India



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I love writing love stories although I rarely write poetry but whenever I do so, I assure it touches everyone's heart...... Shhh!!!! I want to be the most loved writer of India. And I also like writi.. more..