I Love You

Dedicated to someone whom I Love, yet could not express my feelings.......

When I saw you the first time, 

I knew that you weren't mine

Still while sitting in the class I would adore you sometime,

And think of dreams in which you would be mine

Seeing you laugh would make me feel happy,

To satisfy myself I would see your photo in my *Lappy*

Crazy I was and Crazy was my Dream,

I loved your face even without any sort of Cream

While sitting in the Bus you would struggle with your Hair,

I wish I would've told you how much I care

Time has passed now while gifting me nothing,

I regret till today of not asking you anything

I was afraid at that time, I don't know why,

When you went away I didn't even bid you Goodbye

My arms are still open only for you,

And today I have the courage to say 'I Love You'

Author's Note

*Lappy* stands for Laptop.
Any suggestions will be appreciated......and please tell me about my Grammatical mistake......

Reviews

[R Smith]

nice dedication Rajat, I guess there is always hope and new beginnings, if you want grammar, i'm not so great but 2 things i noticed, 'Time has passed' instead of have and 'I didn't even bid you goodbye' instead of bit, sorry i can't help with punctuation but i'm rubbish at it myself :)

[Rajat malik]

Thank you very much Richard for motivating me and of course for suggesting me something new this time also.

[Destiny Dreamer]

Awww AMAZING ... I wish U find that courage and just SAY IT. Adorable piece of work. U know I have a technique of doing things which aren't easy for me to do or which scares me... So the technique is whenever U are about to do something or say something .. Just close Ur eyes and count to three. Do or say that thing on the count of three so that U won't OVER THINK! Often over thinking leads to failure! And as I told U before "The only failure is never to try"
Thanks for sharing an AMAZING poetry!

[Rajat malik]

I am thankful to you for making my evening....you again taught me something different, something which i haven't learnt from Life yet.....
Thank you again.....And i will try to do what you have suggested.......A nice teacher and a nice friend.....thanks for being a part of my life

[Destiny Dreamer]

My Pleasure ... ^_^ Thanks for having me :D

[Rajat malik]

What should i say?

[Destiny Dreamer]

:D Umm I guess Nothin' :D

[Rajat malik]

Hmmm......i too think so

[Mitali Shah]

So sweet yet painful one Rajat. Many of us feel short of words at times and we just can't help ourselves.

[Rajat malik]

Thanks Mitali....hope you would've enjoyed it

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the poem. Most of us had a secret love. We didn't attempt to tell. I liked the flow of thoughts leading to a very good ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Rajat malik]

Thank you very much Coyote.....Felt nice that you understood me

[Coyote Poetry]

I did and you are welcome.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!!
such sweet words of love and regret......
awesome work....
i liked it!!!
:)

[Rajat malik]

Thanks Pushkar once again......

[Cara]

wow really amazing, loved it, thank you for sharing

[Rajat malik]

I would say thanks to you....i think

[Myra]

Haha, I liked the rythm and yup, the poem itself. :P And also the courage at the end, lol my grammar isn't good enough to point out some mistakes in your work. According to me it's impeccable, keep it up!

[Rajat malik]

Thanks Pokemon.....felt great that you liked it......

[Cladine]

I love it ,well expressed feeling. I'm touched with your poem . Nice wordplay .I have no words of advice but I just want to say I like this piece :)

[Rajat malik]

Thanks Cladine.....your words are enough for me

[Cladine]

Welcome :)

[Kshitij Srivastava]

Loving a face without any cream is not what everybody is capable of.well done : )
Apart from the points Richard mentioned, there is an unnecessary 'While' in line 5. You are good with 'seeing you laugh......'.
Grammar, unfortunately, is not something I can tell you about. Keep posting. ☺

[Rajat malik]

Thanks Kshitij, i will surely remove that 'While'