The Bleeding Angel

A poem about pain

Bleeding Angel

Her tethered wing, her torn face,

She knew she was out of place.

Hurtful words flew inside her like little birds.

Her existence was full of hurt.

She even forgot to fly,

But what she didn’t forget is how much she wanted to die.

Tears roll down her cheek,

She feels like nothing,

She feels So ugly, so weak.

She just wants to fly away,

She wants to,

But not today.

Her wings are tethered and torn,

What happened to the beautiful feathers she had when she was born?

A second tear rolls down her cheek,

She’s a bleeding angel,

So ugly, so weak.

Reviews

[Mizuki Tsukiakari]

I wish I knew what happened to her. I enjoyed this piece, but it feels a little incomplete to me because it doesn't explain exactly what happened to her. I'm sorry if I sound out of place, and if that was you're original intent; to leave you in wonder.

[Soul Fire]

There is more to this piece, but I have not completed it, not because I wanted to post an uncompleted piece. But I don't think I'm ready to complete this, because her journey is my journey and my journey is not at all close to being over.

[Mizuki Tsukiakari]

Oh,I see. I'm sorry, I just wanted to give my honest opinion. You were very successful with this piece, and I really look forward to reading the changes you intend to add to this.

[Soul Fire]

Thank you,very much. no need to apologize (: Glad u enjoyed it!

[de_maruf]

pleased impressed
it's good fine nice excellent

[Soul Fire]

thanks very much

[SmileBig :)]

Aww this is so sad but so beautifully well written! Fantastic job Raya! :)

[Soul Fire]

Thanks so much

[SmileBig :)]

Anytime :)

[J. Viands]

A portrayal of one’s own emotion is always an original thing you can’t really go wrong there. If was to critique anything I would have to point out lines 2 and 3 end with the same word. I don’t know what it could be replaced with but if you can think of something I would suggest changing it. Other than that yet again well done

[Soul Fire]

Thank you very much