Single Nights

a poem about being single

Last night

I kissed a guy

and tasted vodka 

with a tinge of bar smoke

mesmerized by the way his eyes spoke.

I followed his sultry voice

outside where his hands found my hips

and I licked the freedom off his lips

the freedom in knowing I can forget his name,

in knowing he will forget mine

in knowing I could get lost in a good time

But we only kissed

and when he left, I smiled.

It felt good to be wild once in awhile.

Author's Note

trying to capture an interesting night.Inspired by Emily Dickinson's Wild Nights

Reviews

[Molly K]

This is an amazing poem, I'm glad that you're writing about something which can be quite a taboo subject, especially for women. Some of the lines in this are so beautiful, "I licked the freedom off his lips" is a personal favourite. Beautiful.

[Kesha]

Hm, yes it was quite interesting indeed. At least nothing bad came of it, in fact quite the opposite I'd say, you got a wonderful poem out of it in exchange. :)

[Hayley]

I love this poem! "I licked the freedom off his lips" is an excellent line.

[Author Gus]

As everybody before me has said, this is a good poem, one of the best I have read from you. In the interest of offering input I'm going to be a grammar natzi for a moment and say that the biggest improvement you could make would be capitalizing all lines, or non of them. Or add commas in what I think was intended to be a list. Again, it's a good poem, and stands just fine the way it is!

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Captivating read!
"I kissed a guy
and tasted vodka
with a tinge of bar smoke" Powerful feeling!

[alanwgraham]

Well done. You have a great skill painting images with well chosen words. There are some great lines in this - I particularly like 'mesmerized by the way his eyes spoke. I followed his sultry voice' and 'licked the freedom off his lips'
It didn't feel like it would only end in a kiss but then if it had to progress further it wouldn't be freedom!
This is really great work - subtle and simple.
regards,
Alan

[Arun MP]

That moment you created!!!!!!
Nice one.
Regards,

[Tony Jordan]

I like the carnal edge to this.
I like that it was mutual.
Eyes that spoke with a sultry voice...is a lovely mixing of the senses and gives a good sense of wild abandon.
These memories make us smile and the world will wonder 'what is she smiling about...?'
Nicely done Jazz Lover.
:)

[Chris A Jones]

You captured the moment. Seems as though you had a good time based on the way this was written.