You don�t know

A Poem by Revan

You don�t know You don�t know how you destroyed me You don�t know how I fell You don�t know if I am unforgiven You don�t know if I am alone You don�t know what im feeling You don�t know if im on my last leg You will never know If I find som

You don’t know how you destroyed me

You don’t know how I fell

You don’t know if I am unforgiven

You don’t know if I am alone

You don’t know what im feeling

You don’t know if im on my last leg

You will never know

If I find someone again

You are not god

But you’ve been right so far and there’s nothing I can do

© 2008 Revan

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Chaoscaine

Spacing would be defenately a perk in this case. To seperate the verses signifies a poem rather then a runon sentence. Also, unfortunately, I don't know what your point in your piece is. I hope to understand it, so that it may have more power, but also, it lacks the rhytum and consistance that makes poetry art. This is constructive critizism, I assure you, for I do see a spark of talent in those words. It merely needs to blossom.

Posted 17 Years Ago

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Added on September 11, 2008
Last Updated on December 2, 2008

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Revan

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i am the angel of misery i am there but not you dont see me but i see you and i am here to tell you my feelings and my life storys stay posted more..