Conscious

On the delicate frost of yesterday

 

My memory floats like a leaf

 

My want fights to notice

 

and take account

 

All fears lost to ecstasy

 

but lucid sensibility

 

begs for reason

 

and a penumbra of a

 

conscious thought

 

flies just beyond my reach. 

 

Reviews

[Emily B]

delicate and ethereal, lovely words

[Revery]

Thank you Emily! :)

[Belle]

The entire word choice is highly impressive.
I totally love the piece's diction.
Also, apart from the literal picture created
by your words, I can sense in my mind's eye
the intense battle between the tripartite of mind,
meaning in this sleek piece you created both
literal images and figurative images.

Impressive. Excellent piece my friend.

[Revery]

Thank you Belle, I'm glad you enjoyed. :)

[Belle]

It is always a pleasure to read from you.
I notice in most of your piece, I see battle between
the id, the ego and the super ego which I can relate very well.

[Patrick]

fantastico writing! a very refreshing feel to it and as the others said what a perfect use of a very uncommon word. thanks for your reviews by the way :)

[Revery]

Thank you so very much, I enjoyed reading your work and will go back and read more.

[the_stoic]

i personally love poetry which makes me think and transcends me into the imagery.. this was a perfect one in that aspect .. brilliant poem !

[Revery]

Thank you for reading and commenting. Always an honor.

[Mia]

So until I read your explanation I had no idea what penumbra meant...it is a great word, and you used it beautiful.
"and a penumbra of a
conscious thought
flies just beyond my reach. "
Those magical lines would have flown over my head...until I Googled it that is *blush*
This is beautiful!

[Revery]

Smile! Thank you Mia. Regarding penumbra, would you believe I was introduced to that word in a business law class in college.

[Mia]

Haha :) that's slightly weird. It’s a pleasure.

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Beautifully written. Penumbra is new to me, still felt the flow of your write. Splendid!

[Revery]

Penumbra is a astrological term for the very edge of a shadow, or the shadow of a shadow. Great word. Thank you for reading and reviewing.

[Val Dohren]

Love the first two lines, just beautiful. Great write.

[Revery]

Thank you

[Bats In The Belfry]

This resonates with me right down to my toes. I enjoyed reading this immensely. The delicate battle...sigh...so beautiful.

[Revery]

Thank you, I love your description of your experience. Thank you for the compiment

[Seashell]

Oh.. I am reading all of your work here tonight I think..haaa
I guess it's because it's all so passionately written making it interesting and one simply can't stop reading till the end never getting bored...and so left wanting more...Thank you B x

[Revery]

Thank you so much. Your comment are such a hugh compliment.

[Yheela]

Light as a feather, or a leaf maybe, and full of gorgeous imagery.

[Revery]

Love your description of it, thank you.