Ogre and Maiden

impossible love

With your smile, you lighten up my world
Even though it's you I should avoid
You're my unexpected savior
The moments with you is what I will always remember.

The moments with you is what I will always remember,
Even though I'm betraying everyone's favor
May God forgive this sin,
Of loving you whose eyes can't be seen.

Of loving you whose eyes can't be seen,
I wonder if you're not blind
What will happen?
If you see this abomination in front of you.

If you see this abomination in front of you,
You might hate me
I don't want to lose you

I don't want to lose you
That's why I am sorry
For wishing for you to stay blind
I don't want you to see the real me
I'm not ready for the outcome
 
I'm not ready for the outcome
But I love  you that's real
Your fate is in my seal
My maiden stay with me forever
Let this ogre be you lover.

Reviews

[Writer #00]

Aww... so sad. Definitely going to add this to my favourites.

Great use of irony in linking each stanza with the last and first lines of each, yet the ogre and the maiden are anything but linked. Wonderfully writ; well done.

[Rhianne Ney]

Thanks for the review, (:

[Writer #00]

Thanks for the poem : )

[Rhianne Ney]

:D

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good tale. Good description gave the poem a very good storyline. I like the conversation and the desire in the poem. A very strong ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Rhianne Ney]

thanks for reviewing this! I appreciate the effort.. ;D