haiku suite (nearing season)

Haiku

bitter breezes breathe

soaring leaves fluttered respite

 hue strewn forest floor

textures richly mute

nude limbs buttress pale gray skies

bareness now lives here

snowflakes  a-flurry

brightened mantles cold n clean

quietly lie still

rw jenkins
©2015
 

Author's Note

Constructive critique is always welcome! : )

Reviews

[William Michael Reeves]

Would this be considered a choka of haiku? I recall you had a blog or lesson about Japanese forms I need to read. As I understand haiku it should also reference a season. Maybe that is not a strict rule. I've noticed nudity is a common theme in your poetry in one fashion or another. Nothing more pleasing to the eye than form revealed. Particularly the female words formed in beauty. (?)

[Richard🖌]

Greetings, Bill 👊

It simply is as stated: A Haiku suite. In Haiku, the season (Summer, Fall, Winter, Spring) written about is never mentioned, but rather revealed in the spirit and imagery of its lines.
Nude, in the sense it's used in one of the Haiku, refers to bare limbs.
Nudity is a naturally beautiful state for humans … it's weather, occupation, and societal/moralistic mores and inhibitions that allocates its unsavory connotations.
I would agree with your poetic assessment, when done with skill, admiration, and respect.

"Choka"
A form of long waka (Japanese court poetry of the 6th to 14th century) about any topic, of at least 9-lines, consisting of alternating lines of five and seven syllables, ending with two lines of seven syllables.
With no rhymes, capitals, or punctuation, the total length of the poem is indefinite.
5/7/5/7/5/7/5/7/7
(or)
xxxxx
xxxxxxx
xxxxx
xxxxxxx
xxxxx
xxxxxxx
xxxxx
xxxxxxx
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Thank you for your visit, Sir! ⁓ Richard🖌

[William Michael Reeves]

Interesting how different definitions and rules can vary. My research had me believing a Choka was just a series of Haiku strung together. And Waka is any Japanese poetry written in Japanese and Shi is Japanese poetry written in English. Like anything, multiple sources are required to avoid alternative facts. Thanks for the enlightenment.

[Cherry Pepperweb]

Autumn welcomes winter so beautifully.

[Richard🖌]

Yes, Cherry,
Thus, beautifully done is your welcoming review for these tender little Haiku.read moreYes, Cherry,
Thus, beautifully done is your welcoming review for these tender little Haiku.
I cannot thank you enough for your inspiring touch of praise! ⁓ Richard

[J.J. NIGHTINGALE]

I love the cool of Autumn..

This is a wonder-full haiku .

Perfection................ Jazzy

[Richard🖌]

Yes, I agree, Jasmine,
Autumn really is a most delightfully refreshing time of the year … it feels like a time of preparing for the enriching snows of Winter, that Spring's renewal will so dearly need … thank you! ⁓ Richard

[J.J. NIGHTINGALE]

You are welcome Richard........................ J.

[....................]

ah, the coming of winter promised on those autumn breezes...beautiful images you have captured here, Richard...

[Richard🖌]

I thank you, Thomas, for the wonderful gift of your presence once again in reading and reviewing this modest little set of Haiku … your words are as a fresh breeze, themselves.
When you've gone, there is ever a glow of encouragement that lingers, I am so happy for! ⁓ Richard

[andrew mitchell]

A lovely fragile delicate poem on the changing of the Nature's guards! The seasons!

[Richard🖌]

Thank you ever-so genuinely, Andrew … your words have served as inspiration:
staunchly without fail
each season guarding nature
cedes to naught but time
For such a moment, My friend, I am truly grateful! ⁓ Richard