The River, the Clouds, and Us.... (longing)

Free Verse

Author's Note

Picture: compliments of Wikimedia Commons.

Something set me into a wispy, dreamlike, drifting-off mood.

Please, feel free to offer critique, or anything you feel will help improve this piece! : )

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

I love the cloudy images -- that stanza in particular is striking. The feeling of falling in love with a moody person, and the speaker is the calm anchor ...

one minor thing, I am sure it is just a typo or pesky auto-correct, but its journey does not require an apostrophe, unless there is something in that sentence I am missing.

[Richard🖌]

That you've again blessed one of my pieces, KL … how very happy this makes me feel!
Then, that you love anything about this piece and find it striking, is reward beyond any I could have expected.
I like the wording of your interpretation, too … "speaker", "calm anchor".

About the recent "rogue apostrophe" typos: It is like when one uses loose for lose, their for they're, sell for sale … you know we know better, but get into too big a hurry, concentrating on what we're into, to catch all the wee details, even when we go back through trying to, but not to worry, someone with a keen eye who cares will come along and lend a helping hand, like you always do thank you sincerely, KL! : )

You've left a nice, helpful, and gracious review … warmly appreciated! ⁓ Richard

[Ken e Bujold]

thanks for the suggestion to read this lovely poem Richard. Really enjoyed the journey. great image of bullying clouds

Ken e

[Richard🖌]

Thanks for the read, Ken, and your compliment … glad you enjoyed it. RJ

[Lisasview]

Another wonderful~inspiring poem...Full of metaphors...
"hoping to hear what the moments held"..No two are exactly the same..Dark clouds and white clouds.. great metaphors for all of us.. Moody and not...and dealing with whatever the one you love is...not easy..
Sitting in nature, especially by the sound of the river can be so rewarding....I feel it brings us back to ourselves..
I could be wrong and excuse me if I am, but it feels as though in the poem the writer has gone off to ponder his relationship...perhaps a disagreement? Trying to understand his loves moody nature... The line ....determined to face any challenge and get back to the sea.. Tells me he will never give up on his love for this person...
I love, love, love this poem Richard..
Lisa

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Lady Lisa 🌨

I'm overjoyed that you've strolled back through my portfolio, coming across this little token to yearning thirst for a more congenial relationship, that does not ebb and flow with every passing moment.
Your interpretation speaks with the knowing voice of experience, understanding, and insight that few who've read this piece have shared.

And, I love-love-love your review, Lisa ⁓ Richard🖌

[Lisasview]

Hi Richard,
I see that you say this has been revised...honestly do not know where??? But loved reading it again..
Simply wonderful!!
Lisa

[Richard🖌]

Thank you for reading it again, Lisa.
I didn't say i't been revised, the site said Upgraded because I opened it in Manage Writing to determine if I could align the gray borders, but it would be difficult.

[Lisasview]

Oh, no wonder I could not see a difference..
Lisa, leaving for Tarragona early tomorrow morning

[lightsong]

I was searching for this one wanting to read it again and maybe be inspired...and gosh.. this really tears... still, no one can deny the masterpiece it is. a masterpiece not only with emotions, the most fragile and powerful one inside the being, but also the deep, deep, deep wisdom... outstanding, really outstanding how You mange to give your art like that, and how You deliver your lessons of how to live, how to love... in a special spectacular way that only the hearts can caught it because it's not in the written words but in the feelings and experiences felt while reading, most of all, and I am stunned at myself how I never noticed it my own, I told You I prefer to be a snowflake rather than a star, and same I prefer to be a cloud rather than a star... and your words opened my eyes to new image of this, I guess yes... the star is a star always shining, but I am more like the cloud, changing from being gentle to being harsh, from being completely fragile to be completely powerful... for opening my eyes to this new perspective, I thank You specially. still this is but a master breathtaking diamond.

[Richard🖌]

Ah-so, My Little Ichi-bon (#1) ⛩️

A second bite of the apple, eh?
Well, we both all too well know how very hard it is to resist the deep sweetness we felt at first taste, eh?
On writing abilities, I suppose I've studied and written poetry for so many years it just comes second-nature to me in whatever form my hopeful olde pen wants to dance with.
Yes, you are so like the cloud, ever changing in all ways possible … it is one of your many charms and mysteries to be enjoyed and challenged by; not for everyone, but for the rare special being -- sheer heaven.

Bless you, Dear Ghounwah, for the ever gloriously life-sustaining cloud 🌨️ you truly are. 🌤️
Welcome to 2022, dear poetess sublime! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[lightsong]

You always amaze me how You express "Me" better than I ever could :> maybe after 2449869 years of writing poetry I could do it lol Ichi-bon 😃 Thank You 🤍 to me You a star, always glowing, comforting earth with its soft warming light, of course sometimes it blazes to a SUN 🌞

[lovelymarina]

I loved the personification of the clouds and weather in this piece. It fit the poem really well. While reading this “free verse” style poem, I recognize how important the punctuation and syntax is, without it, the poem wouldn’t strike and intrigue us as much as it does! Of course, the words are amazing, but to keep the reader engaged is to utilize your punctuation for sure… I am now better learning and gaining a complete understanding of the free verse poem. This was lovely to read, and gave me a deep feeling of nostalgia, with a vivid image painted the entire time through. Thank you for sharing…
Marina

[Richard🖌]

Ahhh, Lovely Marina 🌺

Something in your lilting voice you speak beckons to the hopeful bard, lures him into sharing more … harbinger of mysteries yet revealed 'pon each new step?
How blissfully quick you observe and learn, and what an encouraging promise it foretells in validating and meeting the potential I see in You.

You've stepped upon the page, Marina, and swept so smoothly into my deeply appreciative senses … how can I thank you enough for such pleasure?
Gratefully yours. ⁓ Richard 🍃

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Wow I wish my man was as calm as the way you portray here for I'm as calm as the calmest sea but my man is like your moody partner 'ready to dampen everything at the slightest provocation ' like you say in this wry dreamy awesome creatively expressed poem. Kudos!!!
I don't think I would be able to come online for a few weeks so if I don't respond and write further you will know why, dear great poet!

[Richard🖌]

Ahhh, Lovely Lady Zaynab 😌

"For a few weeks," you say?
You surely shall be missed by Me, and many others of your fans and admirers, I would think.
Oh-MY! You called me, "dear great poet!" From such a splendidly-skilled, intelligent artist, I'm warmly a'blush.😊
"I wish my man was as calm as the way you portray here" Wouldn't it be wonderful, Dear Zaynab, if we each had found a blissfully harmonious mate, in-tine with our spiritual, mental, emotional, and sensual natures … how beautiful and full life would be, eh?
Thank you for such lovely encouraging praise, compliment, and expressed appreciation in "Kudos!!!" I'm so very grateful, too, you've let me know (through your understanding) how we've connected through this deeply yearning poem.

With my warmest "Thank You" hug!"
Come back soon, Zaynab ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Patricia]

this is lovely, I love nature and love entwined. Nature is one of the greatest muses out there. You write very well and pull me into your world.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you ever-so warmly, Dear Patricia🌦

For such a beautiful review.
The timbre of your gentle praise and gracious compliment, combined with how well you relate through voice and feeling, catches a bard's breath and skips his hopeful heart a softly swooning beat.

What more could one ask for than knowing their earnest poetic efforts pulled you into my world … where you're always welcome! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Patricia]

Oh, you are such a charmer! I, of course, will come to visit

[Richard🖌]

I'll leave a light on 🔆

[LazerRays]

Very smooth and almost like a trance. You ha a way of lulling me into a fantasy world of your words. Calm, but yet fast paced like a river. It hummed with spirit and life as well. A very fine poem indeed

[Richard🖌]

It's so lovely, Sarah ✨

The adjectives you've used in describing the sensations of your feelings and understandings of this rather pensive Free Verse piece.
Your words, an intimate poem in themselves, have touched me, as-well.
It's beautiful how you've fallen into the moment's meanings of my own words.
You're a blessing to a bard's hope to share, connect, and please.

Thank you most warmly, Sarah ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Kay/Hayden]

Wow You definitely set my standards high for future poems I read of yours! So imaginative and relatable. The first lines are my favorite! Have a wonderful Thanksgiving! -Kay

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Kay 👋

What a wonderfully lovely and thoughtful review you've gifted this rather pensive Free Verse effort.
It's appreciation and praise like yours that inspire me to keep writing and sharing.
I can see why you've selected the lines you have … the first two verses, in particular, relate so closely to both of us, eh?

Thank you sincerely for your charming visit, Dear Kay -- I wish you a most Happy Thanksgiving, as-well. ⁓ Richard 🍃

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This has a classical, almost mystical feel to it as nature and the river become the metaphor for life's passage and the rage and calm it often offers. As with your more formal pieces it is word perfect, phrase perfect and so well constructed.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, John, my honorable friend. ✊

I suppose there is little (if any) reason why Free Verse cannot be a classic in its own right; though, few would ever think it's so … and, I can conceive of nothing more gratifying than for one as skilled a you to grasp and praise the very essence of my humble effort.
Ironically, I'll bet you can relate to the moment of this piece quite easily.

Bless you your kindness and thoughtful generosity! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Cherrie]

The magic of water, the secrets it whispers, and the cycle of life that depends on its path. I love what you did with this and the photo paired with it, so relaxing.

[Richard🖌]

Gratefully yours, Cherrie 🌦

I can't thank you enough for sharing your keen keen insights and expressed appreciation for this rather yearning poem.

I am so very glad (and a bit surprised) you were able to find a bit of comfort and ease from amongst my humble efforts in this one, Cherrie … hugs! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Cherrie]

Your welcome, I like when nature is given a persona and here you create a tempermintal love that the river perpetually pursues.

[Richard🖌]

Ah-YES, Dear Cherrie 🌦

This one is (maybe) overdone with metaphor, or from the comments in reviews, it seems few get the true gist of this piece. But, you've let me know you have, and what more could I hope than this? : )

Thank you, M'Lady ⁓ RJ 🍃

[Cherrie]

One of the best parts of writing is when our small little vision of a thing is given life with each read. It becomes something new (even to the one who wrote it) :) .

[Richard🖌]

So wisely and beautifully related, Dear Poetess. 🌱