The River, the Clouds, and Us.... (longing)

Free Verse

Author's Note

Picture: compliments of Wikimedia Commons.

Something set me into a wispy, dreamlike, drifting-off mood.

Please, feel free to offer critique, or anything you feel will help improve this piece! : )

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

I love the cloudy images -- that stanza in particular is striking. The feeling of falling in love with a moody person, and the speaker is the calm anchor ...

one minor thing, I am sure it is just a typo or pesky auto-correct, but its journey does not require an apostrophe, unless there is something in that sentence I am missing.

[Richard🖌]

That you've again blessed one of my pieces, KL … how very happy this makes me feel!
Then, that you love anything about this piece and find it striking, is reward beyond any I could have expected.
I like the wording of your interpretation, too … "speaker", "calm anchor".

About the recent "rogue apostrophe" typos: It is like when one uses loose for lose, their for they're, sell for sale … you know we know better, but get into too big a hurry, concentrating on what we're into, to catch all the wee details, even when we go back through trying to, but not to worry, someone with a keen eye who cares will come along and lend a helping hand, like you always do thank you sincerely, KL! : )

You've left a nice, helpful, and gracious review … warmly appreciated! ⁓ Richard

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing use of words and thoughts Richard.
"then, there's me … I'm like the river,
soaking you in, feeding on you,
determined to face any challenge
to get back to the sea...."
I liked and I understood the above lines. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Richard🖌]

Nice passage you've singled-out, John … one of my favorites in this piece, too
How happy and gratified it makes me feel to know you like and enjoy my little efforts.

A million blessings, My Friend! ⁓ Richard

[Coyote Poetry]

You did very well and you are welcome.

[GalaxyGhost]

I did find this poem quite peaceful and wonderful! Although I had a hard time reading the words because it is light, but I guess it adds to the dreamlike state to the poem because the wispy smoke is also silver.

[Richard🖌]

Hi, GG!

I darkened the font a bit for you … hope it helps.
You are right, the grey was meant to soften the feel.

Thank you ever-so warmly for reading and enjoying this little piece to tender moments of loneliness … hugs to you! ⁓ Richard

[GalaxyGhost]

You are so welcome! I honestly love your style of writing as you are one of my favorite writers here! mega hugs back!

[Richard🖌]

"BLUSH!"⁓*

[Angelheart1]

This is a Masterfully penned piece of work Sir.

The tender, sad, yet beautiful words that you have shared takes the reader by the hand and leads them to sit next to you by the River allowing us to soak in the anguish you were feeling at the time of this writing. It tells of the reality in life that many of us can relate to.

A brilliant piece of Poetry - both in writing & presentation.

Wishing the best of days to you Sir. 🌺 Angel🙏

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Angel Dear,
It was so nice having you there bedside me, keeping us warmed by river's edge … hope you did not too much mind sharing the rain.

Best to you, too, Lovely Lady-Poet … most gracious smiles 'n hugs! ⁓ Richard

[Angelheart1]

I did not mind the rain at all for I was wrapped in the warmth of your luscious words Sir. I truly enjoy reading the words you share for they take me to places only imagined before. Returning big smiles and warm hugs back to you Sir. Angel 😇

[Richard🖌]

"Sighhh!"⁓*

[Angelheart1]

Even your "sighhh" is beautifully shared and presented! 😇