Golden Words (promise)

Quatrains in a/b/c/b 6-count: For someone special who's been waiting on something new from my olde pen🖌 Rhyming Quatrains in a dancing 6-count, with an abcb rhyme scheme … hope you enjoy. : )

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Golden Words

O’ that I were handsome,

buff as I want to be,

I’d sweep you off your feet …

steal then your love for me.

I’d be there beside you,

listening to your woes,

offering soft solace …

embraced through highs ’n lows.

We'd share each ardent wish

to cross our minds each day,

swallow your breathless sighs,

letting you have your way.

Paint the sky above you

soft fuchsia of your lips,

kiss their willing wonders …

all others’ they’d eclipse.

Strum you a melody

more precious than a rose,

sing you songs of romance …

up-curl your happy toes.

We’d lay beneath the stars,

speak love words without sound,

feel stirrings in our hearts,

with fireflies all around.

When highest moonglow soars,

reflecting in our eyes,

we’d sweetly surrender …

make-love ’til first sunrise.

Those promises we'd make,

vows never to be broke …

Nature there to witness

each golden word we'd spoke.

Richard W. Jenkins

    © 17 Jan 2023

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Author's Note

Artwork from Pinterest: Guitar Lover's Embrace, digital watercolor by Nicki Marie Smith, ©2012.

All "well-meant" constructive critique you feel will improve my skills and/or better this poem are welcomed and appreciated. Thank you for reading. ✍🏼

Reviews

[Alla Antsis]

Richard, your poetry is light, airy, bubbly, with smells of the light perfume and lilies…. How does one have such a way of delivering??? Even when I am at ease with joy, contentment and surrender, I am not able to get there. You must have a distancing ways and loving protected heart. It is a very distinct and special talent… and I truly envy yours.

[Richard🖌]

How lovely, Alla 🌺

You truly are to treat me to the song of your sweet poetic voice.
That which you say of Me, mirrors my sentiments of You

Hugs 'n smiles of grateful thanks to thee, Dear Poetess ⁓ Richard🖌

[Robert Trakofler]

what a nice melody these lines make:) the structure of 6/6 makes a surprising tune with the interlacing stressors I never try this but I like it very much I oft do quatrains of 6/8/6/8 for this type of poem. the feeling that flows from these lines is perfectly crafted old friend

[Richard🖌]

Hello, My Dear Robert 🌾

I've missed you so, Ol' Friend …
so glad to hear your smiling voice,
your absence at an end.

Yes, isn't it like magic, the dancing rhythms metered lines can create when blended with lovely laid syntactic words in flowing poetic voice?
The 8/6/8/6 Ballade meter is one of the most enduring all-time popular of them all, and your 6/8/6/8 count is one I have yet to try, but is sure interesting enough to give a go, and I soon shall.

Thank you so very much for sharing this wee romantic poem with me, and your blessing's bright praise! ⁓ Richard 🍂

[Richard🖌]

OOPS!
I meant 8/8/8/6 Ballad meter, not Ballade … sheesh, don't get olde, it ain't hardly worth it!

[Mauricio Montoya]

Hey my brother I had to get the meaning, ether it's a first love or true love nevertheless it's a good write, now that's love.
Thank you for sharing this because it's an excellent piece.

[Richard🖌]

And, a good morning to you, Mauricio 🌤️

Thank you for sharing this romantic little number with me, and you are most welcome, too.
i wonder if "first" and "true" love can possibly be one and the same? Yet, I get the gist of your meaning that it, sometimes, makes a difference to know.
Still, it's obvious you grasp that "love" is "love" when you see it … while it seems so many can't.

Your praise makes writing and sharing a pleasure! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Mauricio Montoya]

Yeah that's tough one because it's always your last love that was the true love, but we always wonder if first one would've lasted, thanks Richard

[Richard🖌]

Good chat! : )