Shooting Stars⁓✨

Simple Octet in 11-counts per line, abab rhymes … with a wisp of poignant gentleness.

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 Shooting Stars✨

Shooting stars dive deep into cool ocean waves,

’til each flame’s quenched, to sizzling embers’ chagrin;

as tho' spent dream've drowned in cold, wat'ry graves,

bright starlight extinguished by what’s died within.

O’ lift our hearts once more to raptures above …

there, where we’ve ever yearned to fly soaring free.

Two leaves drifting in gent’ly warm, golden love;

we’ll land as one-embraced ~ in sheer ecstasy.

Richard W. Jenkins

   © 30 Dec, 2023

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Author's Note

Artwork from Pinterest royalty free images.
Octet: Any eight line poetic verse.

Please, feel free to critique with anything you feel will better this work. ✍🏼

Reviews

[Lisasview]

Good morning dearest Richard,
Another wonderful poem of yours to read early this morning here in beautiful France where the country side is deep with varing colours of green.
Your poem full of metaphors beckons me to get back to writing.
In particular this line...
"Two leaves drifting in gent’ly warm, golden love;" The thoughts that run through my mind as I read and reread this line of yours, that says so much, are full of hope that those who have lost love realize that love can be rekindled...the possibilities of starting anew is so refreshing.
Lisas

[Richard🖌]

Well, M'Lovely Lisa Dear🥂

Good afternoon to you, Lady Faire, over there in exciting Spainland, while visiting France in an artist's beautifully colour-filled trance.
You seem to possess an uncanny knack for grasping and appreciating the core essence of my ever-hopeful poetry … and, how grateful I truly am that, that single highlighted line once more beckons your gorgeous pen to fill your fingers and our hearts with your endearing words.

Yes, Lisa … may poetic love ever be rekindled! ⁓ Richard🖌

[June bug]

This is one wonderful write, Love the Octet form. Always been intrigued by it.
I've tried to write in that form before but it is hard.
Love your write, I enjoyed that last verse.

[Richard🖌]

Good morning, Dear JB 🌤

It is a distinct honor to receive the gracious warmth of your inspiringly lovely words in review to this rather sad, but uplifting verse.
Yes, the Octet can be quite the challenge, but I know you can do it.

Thank you for loving and enjoying my humble efforts! ⁓ Richard 🌾

[Poetic Beauty]

I love the last three lines in this poem. Endless love that continues to soar on

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Lady PB 🥀

There is nothing more gratifying to a hopeful bard than knowing anything about his humble effort is loved by one of his poetess peer …
seems we both love a happy ending.

Gratefully yours … you're welcome anytime! ⁓ Richard🖌