Wait

A Poem by richy

written for BBG

You want new shoes

red bottoms but you wear vans

You want a new man

Someone stronger

I can change.

wait.

I'm not the one

You're indecisive and contradicting

I lose strength If I give in

This was a set up

I get It

wait.

you ain't feel It no more

It was all good just a week ago

but no more

wait.

I didn't ask you to change

I didn't want It

but nothing's changed

You love me

I love you

You don't like me

You're not Cleopatra

I don't like you

I'm not David

wait.

Can't we just accept our truths

© 2016 richy

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Érenn

The words are the soul of the poem, and the way they flow when i read this makes me realize how smooth this one really is. It's an amazing poem and the emotions and sentiments clearly shine through it.

Posted 10 Years Ago

barleygirl

This poem makes me appreciate old age so much! I can barely follow all the starts & stops & twists & turns of this kind of love attraction! But I know, oh-so-well, how this feels (from back in my younger days). I like the contrasting imagery of red-bottomed-shoes vs vans. That's a clever way to say so much about class without all the extra words. The second stanza shows us a tug-of-war, both inside the narrator & also between the narrator & love interest. So much pushing & pulling thru-out, really. Tiresome. But it's how so many relationships can go, so your words are creating a true realistic feeling. Another good contrast is Cleopatra & David . . . again, saying so much while writing so few words. Why do people look for gods & goddesses within their beloved? We're all just ordinary people trying to get along & helping each other get along. That's the relief that this struggle is yearning for. Good word picture.

The obvious title would be: "Wait"

But something a little more complex: "Contradictions"

That's my feeble stab . . . now back to the boring comfortable love affairs of old age! *tee! hee!*