World's Tears

Just a haiku about the rain

Heavy clouds close in,

Pressing, ‘gainst the window sill.

Tears gone unheeded

Author's Note

Just testing the waters. What kind of people are here?

Reviews

[NeiL ArandA]

Beautifully expressed Rin, Good imagination of rain trickling down your window pane and associating it with an unheeded tears flowing down a cheek. Please keep it coming. You have it in you...

[NeiL ArandA]

Here is one similar to yours but its not mine but from a Haiku master . " Dark bosomed clouds pregnant with heavy thunder . The water breaks . "

[Vian]

Ha ha ha, I like that!

[NeiL ArandA]

Here is a funny one so i guess its a Senryu " A labrador barks . In the middle of the night . I got up and pee . " This is mine ...

[Vian]

I think you wanna say "I get up and pee" or you've gotta change the entire thing to past tense due to the "got up"

[NeiL ArandA]

Cool . Forgot gotta write it in present tense . Thanks Rin