Bitter Taste

A different kind of bar fight

Me 

I came pouring, surging out

My nature burned their tongues

 

They 

Their vapid, mindless chatter

Spewed forth and corked my soul

 

Me 

Embittered for a moment,

Let no one taste my words

 

They 

Withdrew to fill their vessels

With more insipid dregs

 

Then,

I and They stood opposite

I gave up ‘give a damn’

 

Now,

They sip shots that satisfy

I soak in contentment

 

Author's Note

Way outside of my comfort zone; could I be getting serious at my age?

Reviews

[Jack...]

I see challenges of fitting in because of stubborness or non-understanding, and once a few drinks flow, "me" loosens up a bit, gives in and joins the party. I know what you mean by changing a style of poetry feeling out of your comfort zone, but this feels good to me. I like the approach and the delivery. I think you did a great job with this Rita. It seems to me, whatever you write, your smile shines through brilliantly.

[Rita L. Sev]

Such a kind comment, Jack - thank you! Yes, the challenge of fitting in, and the process of finally deciding to not care about that anymore - sort of my own "Road Less Traveled" - I too sigh in contentment at my decision.

[Baby Ricochet]

It took me a minute to figure it out. I'm slow don't ya know? But once I did a thought I want a beer but they're isn't any in the fridge so I'll just say this is a fun poem.

[Rita L. Sev]

I may need to rethink my approach on this one - it may not be your slowness, but my convoluted wording. Hmmm... Thank you for reading!

[quinfinn]

are you speaking from the pov of the liquor in this write? it certainly seems that way to me. first, before you dispel this idea as nonsense let me say that i think it is genius. i really enjoyed this write, every single sip!

[Rita L. Sev]

It sort of rambles, I know; yes, I was going for the liquor metaphor, but not a very popular bar order.

[quinfinn]

actually, at the pub down the street they sell about equal amounts of beer and liquor...you see, her in Carolina we like to chase shots with a beer back...usually fireballs and peebers.....great write!

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you! I am quite familiar with a shot and a beer...

[quinfinn]

aha! i knew it!