Hiding

Affected by the news of the day

The evil you've done

the damage, 

the lies

It's all reflected 

in the void of your eyes

You skulk through dark alleys

of your twisted mind

When your soul is laid open

just what will we find?

Consumed by malice

in spite of your youth

Someone should have told you,

You can't hide from truth.

Author's Note

Just how I'm feeling right now.

Reviews

[Deuces]

I completely agree. A powerful, relentless message this poem conveys to evildoers. I also really enjoyed the format. The rhyming and flow was perfect and the message was conveyed smoothly, but harshly.

Therapeutic as well, for these are the real emotions we all feel as of late. Awesome.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Cyntax.

[Bri]

I love the creative structure of this poem. It's short and to the point, but it expresses a clear message. I can easily see the emotions you depicted in this poem.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you so much, Bri!

[Damien Thibodeaux]

Getting your frustrations out in writing again, I see. You know, even without the motivating event for writing this piece, it would be good. I love how it's structured, it's darkside stuff and it's got good rhythm. I can imagine it being written strictly from imagination, even without the Boston bombing. You're showing a different side of Rita.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks, Damien. Yes, that dark side is within me, I just tend to keep it at bay - until some evil creeps into view. Thank you for your kind words and support!

[Samuel Dickens]

Well, the one that survived knows about not being able to hide--that's for sure. Consumed by malice, yes they were.

[Rita L. Sev]

Absolutely. Sad for everyone, even themselves. Thank you for reading.

[Frieda P]

What soul? They should set that boat adrift the Boston Harbor and let him die a slow death. Sad piece, well written & potent Rita.

So that's how you rhyme and it feels so fine.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Frieda. Can you imagine being the owner of that boat? We speculated that he should simply be set down, naked, in the middle of Boston - some real Patriot justice. Don't like these negative feelings, but they creep in at these times.
Thank you for your kind comment about rhyme :) I know not everyone is into it...

[Frieda P]

I hear you, I had a lot more to add to that boat adrift but didn't want to get too graphic here! I think of that 8 year old's family and all the others and what they're going through right now, it's just unfathomable & unforgivable.

I'm into anything that makes me feel and I know it comes from the heart/soul, it could rhyme or be upside down as long as it touches me. :-)

[Azriel]

a great piece, the images and language used here, really do bring out the emotions. also enjoyed the form and structure used here...

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you; appreciate your review!

[Becky]

This is short, but powerful. The rhyming is absolutely flawless, and it's current, which makes it resonate even more soundly. I really have nothing to critique. It's perfect.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you

[quinfinn]

i can't help but wonder if this is spawned by the incident in boston, could be the colorado theatre shootings, could be sandy hook , could be this whole damned country has lost its fookin mind. i appreciate your values and applaud your resonant words herein!!!!

[Rita L. Sev]

Been watching the news all evening. These events just get to me. Thank you for your affirmation!