Unglued

One of those days...

I’m having a hole-in-the-wall day

Nothing feels quite right

Maybe I’ll sweep it under the rug

And loosen my sleep tight

 

My ruffled feathers sank like a stone

My watched pot just won’t boil

My knickers are in a mighty twist

My perfect pitch is spoiled

 

My notions are coming out half-baked

My wild card’s been subdued

I guess that’s just what happens when

The mind has come unglued

Author's Note

Those knickers are driving me crazy...

Reviews

[Robert James Parfett]

My mind often comes unglued! Great little poem

[Rita L. Sev]

Ha! Thanks, Robert!

[Jack...]

Should have used duct tape. Rita, this was fun and a delight to read. I personally loved it, for I do know what it is like to have you mind come unglued.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks, Jack!

[quinfinn]

i knew there was a reason i don't wear knickers. you ladies should really try boxers, they never get twisted and give you plenty of breathing room. Rita, this one is truly amusing and a very fun read. i always did love poetry like this!

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks, Quin. Think I will try the boxers today... :)

[Robin]

Great. Sounds like a typical Monday.

[Rita L. Sev]

Yep. Thanks for reading!

[Frieda P]

Wow, perfect for my day!! Knickers in a twist and all that jazz, this one spoke to me, then poked me in the ribs for good measure! Good one Rita, how did you know?

[Rita L. Sev]

Looks like a lot of us are having a typical Monday... oh, well, Tuesday's almost here!

[Frieda P]

Ha Tuesday's knickers are looking twisted already!

[Rita L. Sev]

LOL!

[Frieda P]

I might wear Fridays, and see how that turns out. ;-P

[Muse]

Sounds like Monday? You gave new meaning to the saying "coming unglued" if I were you, I'd invest in some ducktape, a good housekeeper, and another life insurance policy.

[Rita L. Sev]

Hahaha! Yes, this was a Monday all around! I like your suggestions! Thanks for reading. :)

[Muse]

thanks for the smile!

[Ryan]

strangely enough, I'm having one of those days right now too... I feel like I've been practically floundering through the day. great write Rita :)

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks, Ryan. Some days are just topsy-turvy!

[Ryan]

:)

[John Lauterbach]

Totally felt this one; I got the sense reading it, of having my ideas come out sideways or blundering my speech all day. Or opening a bag of cereal with too much glue on it and having it explode all over the kitchen.

I want to say something about the boil/spoiled rhyme, but I feel like it adds to the piece's theme of having an off-day. I'd almost be happier to see the first and third stanza's rhymes messed up a little, to the point of 'close, but not quite right.' Still, great job bringing out that feeling.

[Rita L. Sev]

Ah - hadn't thought of that "purposefully off rhyme" - I'll have to ponder - it's a good idea! You definitely hit it with the cereal-all-over-the-place, blundering through the day. Thanks!

[Lina Grey]

oh god not your knickers... this reminds me of JustLorry's writing. It's fun, rhyming, and has kid-friendly meaning. Like Dr. Seuss... lol this is my favorite kind of poetry, personally. great job :)

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you for the comparison to Dr. Seuss! :) I love silly rhymes, and sometimes they get stuck in my head until I write 'em down...

[Lina Grey]

I love Dr. Seuss, but I rarely get such silly rhymes in my head :C good thing there are people like you to make them up :D