Far Above the Miracles

Tanka

We fulfill our dreams 

By climbing to the heavens 

Embracing starlight

And hovering far above 

Miracles that don't burn out

Reviews

[Aethereal]

We're stardust embracing starlight across time and space.

[Rita L. Sev]

Amen. Thanks for reading, Aethereal!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Such a wonderfully spiritual vibe to this one. Heaven isn't too far away when we reach for the stars.

[Rita L. Sev]

Amen... Thank you, Dale!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

My pleasure.

[Angel]

I like this. It is full of encouragement, full of hope.
Beautiful write...

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Angel - we need to see the miracles at our feet! :)

[Lydia Shutter]

Such an uplifting write, Rita. It makes me believe anything is possible if we persevere and continue to continue. Wonderful write. Lydi**

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Lydi! There are miracles all around; we just need to open our eyes... :)

[ShelleyA]

Hi Rita. A very good write and message that is short, concise and succinct. Encouraging and uplifting. A skillfully crafted traditional Tanka. Excellent use of brevity. Perfect 5/7/5/7/7 syllabic form. Vivid imagery, good flow and tone. Very nice rhythm. Lovely depth of feeling. I especially like the last three lines of the poem. Beautiful sentiment and hope in the miracles that will forever shine. Good word choice as is the consonance. Well penned and most enjoyable read. Write on!

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Shelley! Truly appreciated!

[ShelleyA]

You're very welcome Rita. It's good to see another Tanka writer. I love this Japanese short form. You can do so much with it and get so much out of it. Take care and have a great day!

[Ed Hart]

the picture says it all...clever girl

[Rita L. Sev]

Good catch - thanks, Ed!

[Sami Khalil]

A shining write as the starlight...Splendid...:)

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Sami!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Sharon Kim]

Beautiful images! I love the line 'Embracing starlight' We are the captains of our own destinies, with a little hope and good luck on the side. :)

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Sharon! Yes, captains indeed!

[Cassie]

This is just what I need right now. thank you my friend

[Rita L. Sev]

So glad you liked this, Cassie! Thank you.

[Frieda P]

Shining Tanka, lots of positive vibration being emitted from your poetry Rita, good one.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you so much, Frieda. :)

[Frieda P]

My pleasure, you're my shot of positivity each day. :-)