The Swan Within

Was the swan within

afraid to show her true self

because she feared that

she would still be in their eyes

the ugliest of ducklings?

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

wow. this is profound - and yes. perhaps she was.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Tammy... That story always puzzled me... WHY didn't she see that she was a swan?

[Marie]

Maybe she was. Sometimes people see what they've always seen and can't understand a change.

[Rita L. Sev]

Yes, you are right... and sometimes they see the truth and think that it's too late... Thank you, Marie.

[Zahra]

superb. True and thought provoking. Though this world's awfully cruel and many go through this fear of being able to express their true self fearing they'll be hated or not encouraged. But what truly makes us amazing and beautiful is how close and at peace we are with our true self. A beautiful poem indeed

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, truly, Voice. You understand my meaning...

[wunder]

~it seems we all have this worry
of 'their' eyes at times-doesn't
matter our age or self-esteem-
at times we do question our
true self with worry - i really
like this poem-it's relatable~

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, James - It's so hard not to see ourselves through "their" eyes at times...

[wunder]

~you're welcome~ :)
(indeed it is sometimes my friend)

[Sami Khalil]

Be your true self. Although the ugly Duckling was chastised as being such growing up she should be true to herself and feel beautiful within...Splendid...:)

[Rita L. Sev]

Exactly - I always wondered what kept her from discovering her true self for so long... Thank you, Sami!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[ShelleyA]

Hi Rita. A delightful write that is short, concise and succinct. Thought provoking. A well crafted Tanka. Good imagery, flow and tone. Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Lovely depth of feeling. Inner beauty versus outer packaging; something all of us have had to deal with at one time or another. Definitely something to think about. Good word choice. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. Well penned and a good read. Write on!

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Shelley - I knew you would recognize the form! :)

[ShelleyA]

Hi Rita. I love form, and short form in particular. You're very welcome. It's always a pleasure to read your poetry. Take care and have a great day!