Cosmic Parallels

Two for One

Lunar surface shines so bright The moon bounce looms, it’s beckoning

The water’s deep and dark The dunk tank draws them too

Between moon and sea, humanity Between these toys, the girls and boys

The face of Divine Spark Roam the avenue

 

Nourished by the fruits of earth Aroma of carcinogens

Refreshed by cooling springs As grills are lit mid-day

Souls unify to dance on And then the drunken neighbors dance

Melodies that Nature sings To whims of the DJ

 

Camaraderie of mankind The beer flows with their buddies here

The laud of angel choirs No ID required

A day of Eden on the earth Kept the party going

Until the sun retires Long after sun retired

Author's Note

Yesterday was my street's block party. It's a small block; from my steps I could see the moon bounce at one end and the dunk tank at the other.

Reviews

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Well done... I love the format, you seem to put words together effortlessly.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you so much, Travis.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

It was a pleasure.

[Will Neill]

Thought I'd stop by and read some of your poems Rita, loved this one.
Will

[Rita L. Sev]

So glad you stopped by, Will - thank you!

[Sami Khalil]

Very creative parallels . I like the form too...Thank you for the two in one combo...Any other condiments with it...Just kidding to the last part...:)

[Rita L. Sev]

Ha! This was the combo platter... ;) Thanks, Sami!

[Sami Khalil]

Hahaha...I figured...:)

[Jack...]

Wow Rita, both are beautiful in what they express. The beauty of nature and the beauty of friendship and happy neighborhoods. Would have loved to atten that block party, but in a way I did.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks, Jack - so glad you liked this. I am happy to be on a block that gets along well enough to do a block party.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I used to see this scence in english teens movie, block party and I assumed it is fun. love the contrast of this writing. Truly amazing.

[Rita L. Sev]

Block parties really are fun. Though sometimes, they seem to bring out the best in kids and the worst in adults... Thanks for reading, Marc!

[Tom]

There's something ethereal and angelic about this jovial poem, makes me think of folk from ancient times, dancing outside under a fading summer sun in joyful bliss, celebrating and grateful their harvest has been fruitful and their granaries are now well stocked for the advancing winter!

Enchanting, a fine poem !

[Rita L. Sev]

Ha! I like that image, Tom - I never thought of my imbibed neighbors in this way, but it works! :) Thank you!

[Aethereal]

I enjoyed the stark parallel between the natural and the artificial. Human beings tend to lose sight of the natural through their obsession with that plastic environment that they're addicted to. In time, the whole human race shall be encased in plastic cubes forever frozen in time as anachronistic fossils sunken two miles below the surface of the Earth.

[Rita L. Sev]

Plastic environment - you said it. Thank you for reading, and for your insights, Aethereal!

[Angel]

Wow.
Just
Wow.

The way you draw these paralells...well, they are fascinating. You have an amazing mind, my friend.
Awesome write.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you so much, Angel. My mind does some pretty strange things; I'm glad someone can appreciate that!

[Marie]

Very interesting. I could see the parallels all the way across.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Marie; I truly appreciate that!

[Stella Armour]

great parallels Rita, worlds apart.. i know which one i would choose to be on.....:o)

[Rita L. Sev]

:) Thanks, Stella. Both have their appeal...