The Bridge

 The cars drive under,

 The sound of thunder,

 Soon I shall be under,

Cold soil cannot spoil,

Blood pumps,

Then I jump,

 Dad said,

Never knew he was in the dumps,

 

Reviews

[Betty]

A wonderful poem!! The imagery, the emotion, the sound of this poem is incredible... I enjoyed it very much and like K.S.78 has said, it's very near to me as well.

[K.S.78]

"Cold soil cannot spoil"- Love this line. This was some really great writing and is very near to me. :)

[Will Neill]

Rob, I like this one its quite dark, maybe you should change the ' He' to 'Then I Jump'--just a thought.
Will

[Rob Funk]

Good idea let me give it a shot real quick.

[Will Neill]

It reads much better, it puts a more personal touch to it. Keep writing.
Will

[Rob Funk]

Thank you sir, you have reinforced m interest in writing.

[Will Neill]

We all need some support now and then. Been there.Keep well.
Will