Flat Calm

Reflected on the still surface
Streaks of life moving just below
Orange, silver, blue and gold
Racing about happily, playfully

Further downward it grows colder
Something stirs within the deep
Coiling it's way around my leg
Squirming upward to reach the light

Gently, I pull it free of myself
Lifting it out and into the day
It screams in the brightness, writhing
Trying to cast shadows about

My fingers open in release
Watching it sink back to the depths
This does not belong in this world
Better to let it sleep on in silence

Reviews

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Again, I am awed. We all have that duality, some of us have to fight to hold it back. Not sure if that makes us the lucky ones or not? Well done!

[Rogue]

I think it may make us the lucky ones for we recognize it in ourselves.
Thank you. :)

[Cool Handless Luke]

mysterious, dark and beautiful. i will have to read this some more and give a better review. there's something about it that speaks to me and i'm not sure why or where at the moment. maybe it's a rage being quelled for fear of the damage it will not only do to your target but to you as well? something...i really like this. going into my library.

[Rogue]

I had a feeling this would be the one when you got to it. As through your writing, I see it below your surface as well. A darker aspect.. The locked away warrior that knows the carnage they can wield...

[quinfinn]

i was attracted to this write because the title is awesome.....reminds me of a movie with nicole kidman in the earlier stages of her acting career..."dead calm" but your poem had its own monster, a much more viable and less tangible force....thank you for the enlightened conclusion....wonderfully penned!

[Rogue]

I remember the movie. Him and her on the boat out in the middle of nowhere.
I spent most of my life on the shores of North Carolina. There are rare times when the Atlantic goes "flat". A bit like a stagnant t pond. Not a wave to be had and no visible movement. It is a surreal thing to see really.
Thank you for your kind review, Quinn. :)

[quinfinn]

my pleasure, Rogue

[Angi]

Don't we all have monsters down deep, ready to pull us down if we let them? I really liked this.

[Rogue]

Missed this, Angi. I am sorry.
Yes, we do. Hard to keep them in check at times.
Thank you. :)

[Sami Khalil]

"This does not belong in this world
Better to let it sleep on in silence ."
A very good write on life , soul , time , and the hot and cold aspects of all. I guess we humans only see the top of things or the surface of objects but the least we know that there are roots to each and everything and that is the secret recipe to all. Those roots brought it all up to surface.
One of your great deep writes that I enjoyed tremendously ...:)

[Rogue]

Thank you, Sami. :)
You have learned to read me and my "metaphor for anything and everything writes" very well.
We all have deep dwellers that should remain quiet and undisturbed.

[Sami Khalil]

Hahaha. Good to know. You are right. My pleasure...:)