The Rhythm Of His Guitar

Where is the boy who plays guitar,
and the girl who loves to dance?
​
On a sandy beach,
beneath the stars -
with the moonlight's passing glance
that kissed the waters off the shores,
it shimmers in its glow.

As he strums his guitar,
to a ballad that lovers know.
​Salty and sweet, the taste of his skin,
with a touch of ocean breeze.

Abandoned passion tempts the night
with the taste of lovers' heat.
​Waves crashing on the shore,
break in a gentle roar,
on a sandy beach,
where lovers lay,
​as she dances to his guitar,

With her head upon his chest,
she captures her lover's gaze.
As her hair dances in the wind,
he continues to strum and play,
sparking flames with each caress.
​The touch of her silky lips
ignites a fiery blaze within,
that stokes the sweetest aches.

The drumming of their hearts
warmed the night,
as she swayed to her lover's beat,
with tender hands that held her hips,
as the waves kissed at their feet.
​
The golden sands sparkled
beneath the shimmering stars.
As they made love on the beach,
under the covers of the dark,
the cool night, ocean breeze,
carried their songs for miles afar,
across the tranquil seas,
to the rhythm of his guitar.

Reviews

[red93]

So interesting how you weave the rhymes and demi-rhymes into this Piece. If a guy has a guitar on a beach and his best girl by his side, things are going to happen. A welcome reminder of Summer Nights as the temperature dips below freezing in Bristol UK. Really Excellent ✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️

[RomaJ]

Red, thank you for pausing on this poem. I wrote this years ago. The memories is still very warm. I have to reread it again. It's been awhile. But it is nice to reflect on the version of me, 10 years ago.

[Soren]

A beautiful poem in images and rhyme. Its rhythm ebbs and flows like the tide and is punctuated with lulls between the waves. It is romantic and soft. Nicely done to tick at the romantic heart of the reader. A great setting as well. Love your work

[John]

This has a lovely lyrical flow, though I agree with Einstein Noodle. It has a beautiful cadence and probably benefits from not having a strict rhyming scheme, but it would work just as well at half the length. Well done anyway.

[RomaJ]

I appreciate your words John. Thank you.

[Im His Daughter]

I think it is perfect.. I don't revise anything. Its coming from your heart. Sent a friend request.

[RomaJ]

Aw Thank you. And thanks for the advice. I'll remember that.

[Rocksie]

I like this. You can nearly hear the rhythm of the guitar through the rhythm of the poem itself. Very good imagery too!

[RomaJ]

Thank you. I'm glad you liked it

[Tomás Ó C..]

Beatutiful scene described here...

[RomaJ]

Thank you.

[Emily]

I love the first lines!
Keep on writing!

[RomaJ]

Thank you Emily.

[Philip Muls]

As she dances to his guitar....Love the ritm ...and indeed the sweet innocence of young love.

Well done.

[RomaJ]

Thank you for your thoughts. It was a memory worth keeping.

[Philip Muls]

It is great how you indeed can capture a worthwhile memory in words. It seems then it is safe.

[wordman]

sounds like two young lovers meeting on a beach,he playing his guitar while she dances in the sand
as night falls there passion rises as they make memories on that beach,under the stars smiling down on them,and years later she wonders what happened to that guitar and the young man playing it,now just a memory

[RomaJ]

beautifully said, Word. Thank you for your thoughts

[wordman]

well i wonder what happened to those two,i guess life just got in the way
now we just think back on those special times

[RomaJ]

Sigh, he doesn't play his guitar anymore...:( I miss that. But the music is still beautiful as ever.

[Einstein Noodle]

first half is strong ...with easy cadence and rhyme .. second half seems just a tad repetitive ... i love the wrap up ..with their song drifting across the oceans and stars ... i agree with jacob .. there is a refreshing innocence in this one ... hearkens to a simpler time ... unlike jacob it doesn't make me feel 17 ;) my memories are too long ago ... :)
E.

[RomaJ]

Thank you for your much appreciated input. I will revise the second half eventually...haha
This moment feels so long ago...oh but, it was magical. I was trying to capture that night...it came out as a rhyme..lol The reality was more beautiful than the poem itself...thank goodness, there was no social media or smart phones yet. yikes!

[Einstein Noodle]

i think the magic of the moment is clear ... first loves (especially in the 50's and 60's) are pretty special ... remembering the music, the place and the person brings those warm and genuine feelings along with them ... for me it is about 50 yrs ago .... other "loves " along the way were not the same ..until i met my lovely wife ;)

[RomaJ]

That sounds lovely.