Soap

Pain. 

tears from the eyes.

broken ties.

running out of that place.

an empty space.

hopes so high.

nothing hurts more than soap in the eyes.

Reviews

[Max Watt]

Well, it cracked me up! Thanks for the laugh. Perhaps "tears" would be better than "crying".

It's quite ambiguous actually, I'm really starting to think there's depth here, "broken ties" hmmmm. Yep, the more I think about it the more I fall in love with it, I'm trying to bridge the gap between the last line and the rest of it...I'm thinking hard. As a result of that, you've done your job as a poet. Wonderful.

[Bad Poetry]

thanks for the great advice i'll change it right now.

[Ace Jaxon]

So true though...... I laughed so much when i read the last line this is beautiful

[Urja Gokani]

amazingly written keep it up !!

[Kieta!]

Agreed! And also: nothing tastes worse than soap (so far) :D Very cool! :)

[Heather]

I though this piece was going to be sad but it turned to be really funny so thank you haha!! its a really good piece!!

[Lady B]

That will do it love the way you projected your poem fine works

[SyberRose]

This is true...cute one...SyberRose

[Satan's Daughter]

The symbolism in this poem is stounding. Nicely done.

[Holly Mason]

like the way it reads thank you