MELODIOUS JUMBLE

A jumbled word poem

Melodious Jumble

bothered  be I can

alert quite I am

since out dusk

gig from in just

of levitating twangs

diverse of fidgeting fans

hypnotic rhythms uncanny

warmth sweltering drifts

guitar down beaten rifts

to wanting  not retort

at children cheeky as token

scold  homes from  or broken

 

Author's Note

Reviews would be appreciated

Reviews

[Kristin Lee]

Very interesting. World jumbles are not my favorite format, but I enjoyed this one. I like how you used the red lettering in correlation with talking about sweltering heat. I also like how your poem was shaped like a guitar and you spoke about the hypnotic rhythms of your guitar. Very well crafted.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Hi Kristen, belated thanks yous, for sharing your valuable views, I shall come by to reply to your read requests some time soon :)

[Adam Whitworth]

Terrific sheema, bend those notes

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Hey Adam, thank you very much!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi Sheema, an interesting piece that starts off all 'Jodaesque' and progresses to stimulate mixed thoughts of childhoods balm and sadness about life's brutal reality.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Thanks John, although I am lost by your interpretation.

[Sami Khalil]

This sounds like bullet point poetry...Well penned...:)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I am impressed that you could actually comprehend, thank you very much Sami :)

[Sami Khalil]

Hahaha...I try kind poet...You are welcome...:)