haiku

debris filled hollow
rotting stench, mouldering leaves
sapling breaking through

Author's Note

A little something to get me thinking again.
Was aiming for the set up and reveal someone told me was indicative of this form.
Any constructive feedback welcome (even if poetry people never seem to agree with each other)!

Reviews

[Stan Lee]

I'm not a poetry people but I really enjoyed this little haiku :) I liked the way it starts off all dark and scary sounding and then lo and behold! Hope springs forth in the last line! Reminds me of that old proverb 'without mud there is no flower' :) Nice one S.Mi!

[Shannon]

I really appreciate you taking the time to read. Especially as it is not really your thing.

[hcarson]

a little bit of life amd prettiness among all the mouldering debis of life...summed up in so few words...excellent

[Shannon]

Thank you. These short ones sometimes challenge me.

[Shabeeh Haider]

A ray of hope arising when all around you the world is dark. A lovely message. Something positive will sprout up even when their is dirt all around

*shabeeh*

[Shannon]

Thank you so much for reading. Yes I wanted hope to be clear.

[Bacchus]

...oh and you said you weren't sure about poetry-
brilliance here my friend-
yes, j. said it well- we all wished we had written this one.

[Shannon]

Thank you so much. The encouragement has been amazing!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

through the ugly comes the beauty....just like in life...this is fantastic!

one i wish i had written.

j.

[Shannon]

Thank you so much for the encouragement. I really appreciate. This ad ware is making it hard to keep up with anything.

[barleygirl]

This is truly brilliant! So different than the haiku you usually read. Usually, it's about lovely things. But here, you've shown us the loveliness in rotting things in nature. You have chosen every word to have maximum impact & imagery, which is important in these very short poems. I wonder if the last line has 5 syllables? I only count 4?

[Shannon]

This ad ware is killing me. Thank you so much for the very positive review. I changed the wording. How did I miss that?

[barleygirl]

Yes, I'm getting the dumb pop-ups every other day or so . . . *sheesh!*

[Inject Positivity]

What a lovely use of the word 'debris'... The last line got me thinking... It feels like life is flowing even after the heavy destruction... Excellent Haiku...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[Shannon]

Thank you do much. Debris a powerful word.