Lover

I knew, you were waiting for him

I could see your beautiful worried face

And your impatient time reading in the watch,

As if you were competing in a race.

 

I loved to see you in unbearable unrest

Your pain meant so much of my pleasure

I knew your man will never reach at your spot

He has been tainted with my tactical treasure.

 

 I would make my much-awaited move right now

And offer you a lift in my ancestral car,

To take you to the hell of the heaven,

Where no a*s-hole can ever dare to raise a bar.

 

I knew you will brazen it out

The moment I will say you, ‘Hi’

‘F**k off you dirty uncouth vulture

You are just not my guy’

 

I will trigger off my gun just then

Targeting right onto your stupid sweet head,

To see you lying in a pool of blood

My swollen mind will slowly turn into perfect RED.

Author's Note

A story witten in a poetry mode

Reviews

[Leslie Philibert]

I admire poets who works with rhymes, the discipline and the patience you need.
And my estimation of your poem changed when I read that it is true, this is not violence for its own sake, but I think an ironical sarcastic look at poeple who perform such wicked acts, for what there can be no justification, This is a kind of Indian blues song, a Frankie and Johnny, Bonny and Clyde story, good work.

[Allie]

The strong emotions here dragged me in and held me captive. Great write.

[Coyote Poetry]

A interesting ending to the tale. I like the flow of description and you gave me the surprise ending. Thank you for the excellent story.
Coyote

[Deandra Dawn]

I like how you did a story in the form of poetry. Dark, but I love it. You did a wonderful job with your word use and you had me from start to finish.

[Manpreet]

A sensitive but very much part of our day today life! Beautifully expressed story!

[André-J-Franklin]

Love how it's structure might have to try a story like that one day! Great word play

[reflectingus]

I love the rhyme scheme, and the story told, it was definitely enjoyable to read. There's an almost evil, twisted approach in the end, which created a pleasant contrast with what you thought of the woman, it was like sad and funny at the same time. I also love the language, and it flowed so easily.

[Kuhr Gred]

wow! sweet sentiment.. i like it.. the rhythm, the flow fantastic :) keep it up.. thanks for sharing :)
- Kuhr Gred

[Sleeping Maiden]

How interesting and quite tragic. It seems scary though... but interesting perspective!! It's sad...

[SUGATA M]

Composed on a true story. A boy used to irritate a girl on her way to college. The girl's father put a complain into the local police station. The police came to the boy's house and warned him for his misconduct. After a week the boy chased the girl again, this time to shot her dead on the road.