Lost Child

A poem of a person searching to find out who they are because of hurt and turmoil they have endured

Lost child, lost child
bruised from lack of love
scarred from abandonment
searching to find oneself
why was I put here?

 

only feel pain
can only see hate
feels like im going insane
so much I have endured

 

so young
but had to grow up so fast
have to defend myself
cause no one else would

 

lost child, lost child
bruised from lack of love
scarred from abandonment
searching to find oneself
why was I put here?

 

tears
mind full of fear
crying
but no water is falling from my eyes

 

they use me
they abuse me
stripped me of self worth
i'm living but inside i'm dying
misguided and confused
why am I put on this earth?

 

lost child, lost child
bruised from lack of love
scarred from abandonment
searching to find oneself
why was I put here?

 

By: Shaudae Smith

Reviews

[Elijah J.]

'scard' should be 'scarred.'

Otherwise, the repetition in this is absolutely fantastic. If I could give advice, I would say that I would make it a new stanza before every single 'lost child, lost child.' That would make that repetition stand out even more. After "cause no one else would" and "why am I put on this earth," put in an extra line, making separate paragraphs, and you'd be golden.

Well written, very strong.

E.

[SRS_Writer]

Thank you alley howell i really do need to pay ateention to my diction and spelling because it does change the meaning of the poem. Thank you for bringing that to my attention.

[SRS_Writer]

Thank you for the advice. I had the poem written in stanzas but didnt realize my format changed when i copied and paste. Thank you for bringing that to my attention Elijah J.

[AllyKinzz:)]

Okay, its good. But first off, you should go back and recheck all your spelling, i.e= "eath" earth... If words arn't spelled wright the poem losses its meaning. And make sure the words you put in your pieces are actual words. But like i said, its good, just fix those little things and it will be better.