It`s ok if you cry

Lonely you feel, you feel so far

Without any reason, When you are sad

When memories scroll and crawl up high

 It`s ok if you cry ..

night goes along but you can`t get asleep

and you know in your heart have promises to keep

you know it`s hard to walk you feel hard to fly

it might not be possible but

it`s ok if you try.

Right and wrong.. black and white.

It`s matter of perception and no one can define

Take a deep thought and you know sometimes

the truth brings sorrow

it`s ok if you lie

Sadness and joy the rule which applies

Costs of tears are the only smiles

if someone had cried and reason you`ve been

Then for one`s one smile

it`s ok if you die ..

When heart is broken. it`s okay if you cry.

you know it isn`t possible but it`s ok if you try.

When truth brings sorrow it`s ok if you lie.

if it makes someone smile it`s ok if you die.

Reviews

[Octavia]

There are a few lines in here I really like. The last stanza is probably my favorite, especially with how it sums up the point of the other stanzas. Your ideas (in both pieces I have read) are sophisticated and mature. I relate to them as something that I have experienced.

However, I do find the small errors in grammar distracting (When YOUR heart is broken? Or MY heart is broken? Whose heart is it?) If you would like I can go through and correct them, if that's the kind of editor you are looking for. Otherwise, like I said in my other review, keep reading examples of good writing. You'll get the hang of it.

Keep writing! I look forward to reading more of your work!