Eyes on me

But everywhere I felt Eyes on me. It is real............

EYES ON ME................................... by SADDAM HUSEN

When I was a kid

There was interest little bit

About toxication

 

It was in my mood

“It is a supplement good

For health”

 

I bought tobacco one day

I remember that was day

Of celebration

 

Surprised act for shop-keeper

He fired on me questionnaire

Of its essential

 

I deceive him with lie

I searched many place for unpacked it

But everywhere I felt Eyes on me

A snare bound my hand

It forced me, I could not open it.

Author's Note

I have never taste any kind of "Nasha" (drug, intoxication) and pray for other not to do that.

Reviews

[Irenic]

But everywhere I felt Eyes on me
A snare bound my hand
It forced me, I could not open it.

a poem which which give us the message about existence of god-------- for me.
Like others i will say you are religious and your poem dropped into the bottom of my heart. the last three lines makes me to realize that i commit sins without thinking about him and his eyes towards me.

thank you for writing such a reality realizing poem.

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear friend. You can say but I'm not that kind of religious but Thank you so much for your stopping dear. I appreciate your words.

[Irenic]

you are welcome :)

[gabiaimee]

Guilt can make one feel as if they are constantly being watched, that is very true. Makes an excellent point.

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear friend...

[Genesis R]

this is very power ful i really like this poem

[Saddam]

Thank you dear. I am glad...

[Patricia]

"It forced me, I could not open it" such a clear and well defined completion!

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear friend for this wonderful review...

[Costa Siwale]

I like this writing Ssadd, and its message, drugs can be unforgiving once abused. Well written

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear friend... It wonderful to hear you such a long time.

[Costa Siwale]

Yeah, been off line lately. You are welcome

[RubyOmma]

You are lucky not to have tried drugs - they are bad bad bad and stay away away away. I have many friends who died from them. Too many. Good write. :)

[~]

A good hope for all the kids to stay away from the drugs.

[BL]

Sounds like you had a close shave there, Temptation is such a grey area and you have described being torn by it very well

[Jeyanthi]

Caught red-hand by own guilt. Very thoughtful poem. I like this title of the poem.

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

I think the last paragraph captures a powerful meaning. Very interesting write you have here.

[Ana B.]

An interesting piece. Tantalized by the temptation.....nice work!