man ive never been so lonely and i long for you to hold me

i'm burning. title has no link blah blah you should know by now haha

and forget.
the birds,
water, flightless,
pass me strong slogan
and drenched shoulders
and now fight fight fight
the tears, ahem, too much

i want you to
press hearts
to electrical cords,
now, now
roses on my face
and pearls on my
hands, blossom in
my throat, deepest groan
come home.

Reviews

[Stammers]

Interesting... I like the title flowing into the first line. Hmm... I love the casual voice you use 'ahem, too much' and the title (which pulled me in) 'man I've never been so lonely'.

Your stuff is very different... simple, not wordy. I question it and have to sit down and struggle with meanings from very little. I am pretty sure I love it, uncertain though, I might hate it. You're brilliant all the same.

[BjH]

now maybe i am wrong here
but
the begining seems almost for me
like the reader is walking in halfway through a conversation
maybe
i like to think it is that as it works for me.

like the lady said
BOLD
and to the point
b

[Ms. Gruye]

bold and simple. viva la.