Pillow Talk

She was sleeping,

I wondered if she was dreaming, and was she dreaming about us.

I wondered if I laid beside her would I wake her up.

I wondered about the future I thought about the past,

I wondered where all the people were who told us both we would never last.

I wondered while I stood there, Maybe I'll just hug her,

And if she wakes I'll kiss her face and tell her how much I love her.

I wondered would she like the kiss, or be mad I woke her up,

Cause to take her from her dream is another dream I've broken up.

I wondered about what to do, and what we've already done,

I wondered about the future of our daughter and our son.

I wondered if she loved me, I wondered if I gave her reason

I wondered if she thought that I was someone to believe in.

I wondered about the times I made her angry and upset,

Cause if I remember she remembers and I wish she could forget.

I wondered while I watched her lying, at peace and undisturbed,

If I have shown her that I LOVE HER, or only said the words.

I wondered if she thinks of me whenever we're apart,

I wondered if I have a place forever in her heart.

I wondered if she needs me, as much as I need her,

And if she does could I provide all that she deserves.

I wondered if she knew, how much to me she meant

And that I value most of all the time that we had spent.

I wondered when our children, grow up and leave our home,

Would we be okay, just her and I, or would we feel alone.

I wondered while she slept there, and those thoughts helped me discover,

That I truly never ever once wondered if I really love her.

I love her voice, I love her face, I love the things she does,

I love her smile, I love her laugh, I love her just because.

I love the way she makes me feel, I love when shes around,

I love that she can pick me up and never let's me down.

I love her cause she's who she is MY WORLD and this is true,

But what I love most of all, is when she says "I LOVE YOU TOO"  

Author's Note

Thank you for taking the time to read this. Any comments or advice are greatly appreciated.
Cheers!

Reviews

[Frieda P]

I really like the sentiments in this poem, too many ' I wondered', inmho, not fond of the repetition, I think that could be reworked to not make it sound so tedious.

[Sage Hibou]

This is my first attempt at poetry. My apologies for the repetitiveness, It was meant to be more of a narrative. A breakdown of my personal epiphany. Thank you for your feedback.

[Frieda P]

You're welcome, that's just my preference, not gospel, some people might enjoy the repetition. First attempt, you're doing fine, I wouldn't even share my first. ;-)

[Gracie G]

I really liked the flow of this poem. You did a great job with the rhythm and the image as a whole. A few typos (mad instead of made, were instead of we're, and her and I instead of her and me) but a very good and good-sounding piece overall.

[Sage Hibou]

My writing style tends to lean towards that of a song without music. I am a songwriter by nature. Thank you for catching the flow of this piece. YESSS! proof reading is a must, I will be sure to correct this piece and remember to have someone else take a look as well. Thank you for your feedback.