Empty

My first etheree

Its
Empty.
Yet I dig
Deeper inside
As the dark seeps in
I barely see through it.
Shivering with cold and pain,
I shovel through dirt endlessly
Digging further into my poor heart,
I find it empty without your presence.

Reviews

[FocusedAmnesia]

Love it. Amazing imagery.

[Angel Veselinov]

Very nice Illustrative form of writing :) Deep feelings within thanks for sharing.

[Crusaderscross]

The form gives this poem all its meaning. Really good, simple and to the point

[Abdul Aziz]

Nice etheree. The form is perfect. And the wistful tone it sets is very good. Overall, a job done very well!