Please, Please, Please?

Autobiography.

My mother doesn't speak now,
Only falsities and the necessary,
Father longs for interests shared,
Some twenty one years paired.

 

Sister cries, masquerades her soul,
Bitter struggle, laden with death.
Doomed from the outset,
I can only imagine a life so tragic.

 

I want someone to take this away.

Make me grow up, consolidate my dreams.
Make me itch with latent desire,
Have me and throw me away,
Full of passion, Heathcliff in his eyes.

 

Hurt me until I'm satisfied,
What good is perfection?
I want to feel lived in,
Touched at the core,
Take what you will,
But leave me a gift.

 

I need to remember you.
Bruise me, so I can see you all the time,
Why don't you talk?

Reciprocate my thoughts,
Fight me!
At least disagree.

 

You are a liar.
Another victim of my desire.
Burn, burn, burn.
Never return my kisses.

 

I don't want them back,
They are yours,
My body's screaming,
Crying out,
Put your hand over my mouth,
Muffle my misery,
Please, please, please?

 

 

Reviews

[Spoken]

I really enjoyed this piece. A life of perfection is less than perfect. We need a struggle.. we need to be beaten.. to lift us when we have the truly magical moments.

I want to feel lived in

I don't want them back,
They are yours

These lines stood out to me. Great!

[Arundass TP]

The poem nicely explains the need for love. Each line is good. nicely written work. keep it up

[R J Askew]

I like this. The desire to be alive and feel something, ANYTHING, even pain...anything but nothing. Something to take you beyond the torments described in the first two verses. is this one reason why women often love cads? At least the woman knows the cad will make her feel something. And to feel is to be alive, right? Have I read it right?

[Emily B]

There seems to be two poems stuck together here. It may just be me, the gentle mocking flow of the first two stanzas seemed complete unto themselves. 'I can only imagine a life so tragic,' would be the killer ending.

I like them both.

[Lace]

Wow, this is harsh in a wonderful passionate sad way. I know that doesn't make much sense, but just bear with me.
It's a portrait of a family in disarray, isn't it? It's like...well, this line:
"Full of passion, Heathcliff in his eyes."
Made me think of Heathcliff in Wuthering Heights (I'm a girl, my brain works like that lol) and how he was so confused. Really adds to the whole thing, for me at least.
Written wonderfully, energetic confusion and breaking free anger with every word.
Thanks for sharing =D