Heart Broken

 I thought you felt the same way

Because thats what people said

But now that i know the truth 

I think i'd better off be dead

I love you with all my heart

But I guess that doesn't matter

So I should probably stop

All the pointless chatter

I want to get over it

But somehow I can't

I can't get rid of the feeling

And love you I shan't 

No matter what I'll be here

Through sun, rain and snow

And this feeling of love

Is something I don't want to go

I will always be a moth

To your radiant light

So special you shall be

For you're my shining knight

Reviews

[Arthur Crow]

I totally understand the mood of this.. deeply expressed from the heart. Love is everything crazy that doesn't make sense...it's just that powerful. You wrote this very well, great word weaving!

[Vei]

I love the line "I will always be a moth

To your radiant light". well done!

[BABSIE BEE]

Powerful emotions can produce such delicate yet strong writes. You have done just that. Beautiful. Thanks. Babsie Bee xx

[deeps]

I can feel this and been there, I know the feelng well, well expressed

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

I like this very much...and its true that sometimes the feeling doesnt go away...Great job :)

[Kizitaly]

Good job on this. the only thing that does read funny is the line...

"But now that i know the truth

I think i'd better off be dead"

Maybe you should switch it to read, "I think I'd be better off dead". It might flow a little better there. Other than that...great job!

[Michael X]

This is really heartfelt sammy-jo, I think any reader would be struck by the sincere innocence of love
and desire, you did a passionate and great job