Oceans in my eyes...

A sad poem full of negative energy...

What I expected,
and what I've got.
Just some shattered dreams,
and a hell to rot...

 

Looking at the past,
the path I've walked.
The decisions that I made,
and hell yeah, am shocked...

 

I can't mend,
the damage I've done.
I took my chances,
And I could have won...

 

It's not that I didn't try,
It's not that I didn't cry.
The only fault was,
the happiness that I couldn't buy...

 

Now look at me,
What else've i got?
Just some mixed thoughts,
I'll take them to the grave and rot!

 

There's not much left,
No more place for lies.
Don't look at me people,
I'm holding oceans in my eyes...

Author's Note

Kindly review it...

Reviews

[Lola_Bee]

I can feel so much disappointment and sadness in this piece, very well put together. I would say to this person in the poem to chin up, cheer up, the world is yours too take, never regret because you are still alive, and if you are alive you can still change your situation

[Sanjh]

Thanks for the review and the advice...:)

[Dakota Jean]

"I'm holding oceans in my eyes" very powerful line. I love it (:

[Sanjh]

I'm glad you liked it, thank you...:)

[M.A.Rathore]

This poem is a regret over the desired task not to be performed in time. So the writer feels helpless and weeps for it. Though it is a simple piece written in smallest words.. I like the beauty of lines .
Keep it up..

[Sanjh]

Thanks for appreciating...:)

[M.A.Rathore]

Welcome my friend

[A.D Edwards]

This is very deep, I love poems like this, love the use of metaphors

[Sanjh]

Thank you friend, I am glad you liked it...:)

[MomzillaNC]

Really great imagery and again, a nice, balanced meter.

NOTES: A few suggestions for the following lines:
What [else've I] got?
to take to the [grave…] to rot!
[I'm] holding oceans in my eyes...

[Sanjh]

Thank you for appreciating and the helpful corrections...:)

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome. Hope it was helpful.

[blackfairy3]

I love it its so deep and well thought out. You can feel the emotion in this poem. Excellent work just lovely

[Sanjh]

Thanks for appreciating...:)

[Gurleen Saluja]

Beautifully worded. Nicely penned. Thanks for sharing :)

[Sanjh]

I am glad you liked it...:)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

well written.......but the rhyming seems uneven in the 2nd last verse.
quite expressive and negative as you said.
i liked it!
:)

[Sanjh]

yeah, still working on it, it's bugging me too (second last verse)...
thanks for the appreciation...:)

[Sanjh]

Thanks for helping with the verse...:)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

do not mention and you are welcome.......... :p :)