With you...

Love everywhere.

When we are together,
the stars shine brighter than ever.
Moonlight seems to be so soothing,
I wanna be in you arms forever...

I can hear your voice everywhere,
Like the air it surrounds me.
With every breathe I take in,
You're in my heart, it reminds me...

Whenever I look at the sky,
I can see your eyes so blue.
Constantly looking at me,
I can feel you, it's true...

Living with you forever,
that's what I want to do.
I want to love you all my life,
I Wanna grow old with you...

Author's Note

Review it please.

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

very sweet, heartfelt piece... can feel the emotion dripping from each line.. it highlights those dreams, those wishes, and the depth of that affection... overall, nicely done..

a few suggestions... (just my opinion)

(the stars shine brighter than ever.)... would leave out "the"... flows better...

(Moonlight seems to be so soothing,)... it is ok like this.. but would maybe add more word play and imagery... something like... (moonlight beams seem so soothing)... again..just my opinion

(Living with you forever,
that's what I want to do.
I want to love you all my life,
I Wanna grow old with you...).... you said I want three times here.. would switch it up a little.. reword it.. maybe someathing like...

(Living with you forever
that's what I want to do
loving you all of my life
me-growing old with you.)

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much April, I'm glad you liked it. And thank you again for the wonderful suggestions, they are fitting in perfectly...:)

[AprilRN1210]

you're more than welcome my friend.. glad I could help.

[ayesha gupta]

wow. it was so lovely and romantic. falling in love with your poem. :)

[Sanjh]

Is it that good? Hehehe, thank you for the kind words...:)

[ayesha gupta]

yep. so0oo gud.

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much...:)

[Nikki]

Aww, this was so sweet and I think anyone who has felt love's grace knows exactly how this feels. Good job translating these occurrences into words.

[Sanjh]

Thank you for appreciating...:)