A Princess Story...

Re-publishing it with some changes.

There was a princess,
in a land full of magic.
Her beauty second to none,
and her thoughts so romantic...

 

Searching for her soul mate,
across the countries, across the lands.
She had many adventures,
From the mountains to the sands...

 

After searching so far,
she found her prince charming.
Fierce as a warrior,
and face always smiling...

 

The prince was perfect for her,
their love grew strong.
But as this is a fantasy,
something has to go wrong...

 

The princess was abducted,
"as always", by an evil witch.
Her dungeon between the mountains,
near the fearsome ditch...

 

The prince with his army,
went to rescue his beloved.
But only the prince could reach,
as his army was magically flooded...

 

The prince fought bravely,
but was no match for the witch.
And princess was crying, watching
the witch push him down the steep pitch...

 

The prince held on tight,
Waiting for a miracle.
Watching him struggling,
princess broke all her shackles...

 

She picked up the sword
driving it through the witch's heart.
and saved her prince,
giving his life a fresh start...

 

This story went a bit weird.
But all I wanted to say
is it's not the prince,
who always saves the day...

Author's Note

Trying my hands on fantsy for the first time. Hope you'd like it...:)

Reviews

[Shitsune Hyuuga]

Prince don't always make the effort. Sometimes both sides need to work on it to make things work, being dependent never been the solution to certain problems. Make it be true to life or fantasy, it always have to be fair.

This one's great, for a person who is used to cliches this one is new but then again I also love twists on plots. This don't look like one for a first timer.

[Sanjh]

Well said Shitsune, it's true that for a successful relationship the efforts must be made from both the ends...
thank you for reading...:)

[Shitsune Hyuuga]

You're welcome again :)

[Penny]

Very sweet like every fantasy. The fact that its a story and flows so well lyrically, makes it a winner for me. The message too is very nicely depicted and it is very good for a first attempt. Well done.

[Sanjh]

I'm glad you liked it Penny, thank you. :)

[Penny]

My pleasure..

[Kuldeep desai]

very well done.....i like the last stanza......

[Sanjh]

Thank you...:)

[Misha]

Wow...really nice...i could see the whole story in my mind while i was reading it

[Sanjh]

Thank you Misha, I'm glad that you liked it...:)

[Misha]

Ur welcome

[Confuser]

I loved it! You did well. I laughed out loud. That means GREAT! Thank you Sanjh.

[Sanjh]

It made you laugh means "mission accomplished" for me...thank you so much...:)

[Confuser]

Thank you.

[R Smith]

very good, like the ending and the story was unusual looks like you may have a future in fantasy writing :)

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much Richard, I'll try my best...:)

[stars are far]

That was very imaginative and well written, i loved the fantsy you created here,keep it coming :)

[Sanjh]

Thank you Suhad, I'm glad you liked...:)

[Coyote Poetry]

A perfect ending. I like when the princess saved the day. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much Coyote...:)

[Pryde Foltz]

The prince was perfect for her,
their love grew strong.
But as this is a fantasy,
something has to go wrong…

A lovely turn on the fairy-tale. Great penning.

[Sanjh]

Thank you sop much for the nice words Pryde...:)

[Chandini Hemdev]

Nice work on the rhyme, a few spelling errors, the major one being found "his prince charming" otherwise a nice effort :)

[Sanjh]

Oh! how did I miss that? Thank you for the correction...:)