I Promise...

A promise to keep.

I'll be here,
I promised...

When you left me,
on this lonely path.
Left with just darkness,
And love's deadly wraith...

I tried to turn around and return,
from where I once started.
Kept running in the dark,
everyone thought I'm retarded...

I'll be here,
I promised...

I tried to free myself,
from each and every thought of you.
But the more I thought,
the deeper my love grew...

I cried, I shouted,
Thinking you might hear.
But no one ever heard me,
I lived in shadows of my tears...

I'm still here,
as I promised...

I'm still waiting for you,
from where you left long ago...
But you might not recognize me,
for who am i now? Even I don't know...

But I'm still here,
everyday my love still grows.
You are far away from me,
And I just want you to know:

I'll always be here,

I promise once more...

Author's Note

Help me improve it...thank you...:)

Reviews

[Lenah Mehzabin]

I don't think it needs anymore improvement ..it's already so amazing that it made me teary nd after every stanza when u said " i will be here ,i promised " .. it just made me stop and stare for few minutes ... very beautifull , totally a piece of brilliance.. :)

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked it and it touched you...:)

[blackfairy3]

Your welcome :)

[stars are far]

oh that reminded me of the song "waiting for you" (ocean apart), that was very beautiful and heartfelt, and the determination of waiting the one you love, that is just wonderful and the real love, well done :)

[Sanjh]

Thank you once again Suhad, I'm glad you liked it...:)

[stars are far]

Always my pleasure dear :)

[Poetic Beauty]

The emotions are raw and 're a l. Have experienced this once in my life and it took six years to completely let go and find closure.

[Sanjh]

I'm glad you have moved on, I've seen people wasting their whole life.
Simple truth is "life goes on"...
Thank you for reading...:)

[Khyati]

Help you improve it?
HOW! It's the best it can be! This is one of your best!
IT'S SO AWESOME!

[Sanjh]

Thank you Beautiful Eyes...:)

[ayesha gupta]

its perfect and a heart-touching poem.
loved it.

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much Ayesha...:)

[Sami Khalil]

A wonderful read and write. I recognized it in the shadows of your tears. Excellent...:)..............

[Sanjh]

Thank you brother...:)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).................................

[Surya pradha]

all your poems are so emotional. another masterpiece!

[Sanjh]

Thank you brother...:)

[BlankCypher]

Same as most everyone here, I simply cannot think of anything to improve it :)

It's written well and has a certain air of emotion about it.
Love it :)

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much, I'm glad you liked it...:)

[Alexa Christine]

This is beautiful. Simply beautiful. Its filled with emotion and meaning. There isn't a single thing that I could think of that would improve this. Wonderful job! :D

[Sanjh]

Thank you for the kind words Alexa...:)

[maria ( rose)]

help you improve it?..OMG Its so beautifully written. I was touched by each WORD♥
that really captured my heart. Great JOB !

[Sanjh]

I'm glad you liked it so much Maria, thank you so much...:)

[Maglia Weaver Twill]

You can't improve this can you? When that love returns to you, then. Here in "I promise..." is a promise therein.

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much Maglia...:)