7 til 7

aka 'the détente'

7 til 7

 

translucent morning eternity

warmed by the steam from my coffee cup

no deception left in lazy smiles and bunny slippers

where else can peace be found

except in pancakes and birdsong?

Reviews

[just rose.]

oh, absolutely indeed. this is transcendent - i think we are at our best in early morning, when possibility exists and when the veil that falls upon us all, all day long, rips a bit and lets us see a little past it. i love that the sentiment of peace and rest translates into a very brief poem -- that does an additional symbolic justice to the simplicity of the moment and the fine details of the peaceful feelings it suggests.

[Lorraine]

I’m not really a morning person but from the way you described it here, you make it seem like waking up early is actually something dreamy. You dramatize something ordinary into something quite exquisite. Short but interesting.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[alesuriko]

Absolutely beautiful and tranquil. I love your gift of description. Some of the most mundane things like lazy smiles and bunny slippers can become such an important vivid part of the speaker's life if you just describe it as devoid of deception. Gorgeously written, very beautiful and ever so peaceful. I love your writing and your choice of words. Well done!

[Hamkar]

Is this 7pm - 7am or 7am - 7pm? I think it should be the first. It is so true and rather flimsy. As though I am enjoying a cup of coffee in a very lazy state, I guess this is your purpose?

[Ed Hart]

you have a way, a certain way, that is sweet, very sweet

[Marie Harrison]

Makes me smile thinking about this poem. It's so light and airy. Thanks for a slice of peace.

[Ruth]

I love the title to this piece
Very suggestive of having gone full circle with a days events and the aftermath!
What does an aftermath bring, for they are always clever? Always a reliance on home comforts!
Awesome work!
xx

[i am skeleton jelly]

reminds me of some mornings

and very many stoned evenings

[Crystal Bay]

Simply sweet

[Z. Smith]

"Pancakes and birdsong!" Brilliant! So simple. So simple but powerful! I loved this. Definitely one of my favorites of yours.

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

Very nice, I love this , its simple but very well describe what we need in the mornings :) , this will go to my favorites